Naruto/Gaara - Comments

i really liked the second part. you write very good. i especially liked the "Ramen" restaurants. very unique. kept me interested.

i think this is a very insightful and interesting story,

There's just two things I remember that I wanted to point out,
It would be 'wiped' instead of 'whipped' and 'cheek' instead of 'check.'
But your story is going very well :] can't wait to read more!

this sor, even thoug has some problem, is not really following any stoy ot from the manga but the characters are

aww thats cute lol! It's a little grammical and spelling errors, but nothing too bad :P keep up the good work!

Very cute :]
It does need a bit of fixing up, so if you still want me to edit it a little I can do that o:
I'm not a big fan of Naruto, but I like this story [:

I think this is really good :D of course I pretty much have no clue what's going on cause I haven't read this manga, but it's really good :D