Speck in the Sky - Comments

You made me feel sorry for balloons! Balloons! Inanimate objects! I never thought it was possible, but you did it!
This story makes me want to just find all of the balloons I've ever let go of, tell them that I'm sorry, hug them, and then burst into tears passionately because I popped them while hugging them. Though that might be just because I'm a bit loony.
You know at first I was kind of reluctant to read this story when you said you wanted me to comment on it because I thought a phobia of balloons was weird, but after I've read it, I really liked it.
Overall, it's amazing!

I really like the concept of this. :) Nice job; I like it.
The layout kind of creeps me out because the balloons remind me of gummies and I don't know. Ignore that, I'm weird. >.>

The description of all of this is fanastic. I feel like you thought a lot about it, or you just put everything out, but it was all so... honest. I felt like it was sincere.
You've made me more... scared to let go of balloons. Now I feel like there's a piece of people with the balloon. How can you let it go?
You kept flashing back that fear. It's wonderful.
I think the font could be smaller, but not much else from me.
This was brilliant, anyhoo.

I love the first line, it really helps me understand what this story is about.I like how you go into specifics afterwards, you're not leaving me hanging. I can tell you really think baout this, this wasn't just an idea you randomyl spurted out.

Going back to explain it all way a brilliant idea, and the way you naturally flashed back into the same scene again when your fear took you over at the graduation was astonishing. You wrote that beautifully, there was nothing wrong with it at all.

Although, I don't quite understand what you phobia is. Are you afraid of letting go of ballons, because they mean soemthing to you? Are you simply heartbroken at that horrible teacher for losing your balloon for you? Are you missing the smiley faced balloon? I'd like to see that explained somehow.

All in all, you did a brilliant work. I'm not too sure about the layout though, it get hard to read. A slightly smaller font would work better, methinks [like, 90?] and maybe making the balloons as a background with a white story area background?