*awestruck* Ooooh *-* This is AWESOME! I don't know what it is about it but I love it. I love your writing style, the idea, how you came to a conclusion beautifully. AAHHH I LOVE IT XD I'mma read it again ^-^
Whoa. This was amazing. I don't even know what to say, because I loved this so much. The way you ended it was so creative, and I liked how you tied it in with the beginning.
Good luck on the contest, even though I entered it too. (:
Hmm.... I think I like this too. This story was so heartbreakingly beautiful. I agree with the person above me; I really liked how you started off with everything kind of vague and kept us guessing until later on. Your style of writing has a nice flow and is easy to follow. I liked how you were able to make each character have a distinctive personality, despite the fact that this was only a one shot. And the alphabet thing at the end was a cute touch. Your grammar and spelling was very good. Brownie points!
I definitely like this. You have a nice writing style. And I liked how the ending wrapped up. What I liked the best though was after that first flash back - Along with the beginning it had me dying to know what had happened to (Z for) Zale and what the two boys' story was. It's rare that one shots are that captivating *thumbs up*
Ooooh *-*
This is AWESOME! I don't know what it is about it but I love it.
I love your writing style, the idea, how you came to a conclusion beautifully.
AAHHH I LOVE IT XD
I'mma read it again ^-^