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  • Scar Vengeance

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    Heya great start. you're a great writer. Nice title as well ^^ keep it up the good work xx
    July 5th, 2010 at 02:27pm
  • Kiss and Run

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    xD i love it !
    as well as you !
    July 2nd, 2010 at 08:45pm
  • Kiss and Run

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    the chapter title reminds me of the blind side, xD
    love it, rhythm; <3
    July 1st, 2010 at 09:13pm
  • fat lamb

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    I like it. You write well.

    The only thing that really stuck out to me was the whole Mirror Mirror On the Wall part. It's common for a writer to introduce what a character looks like by having them go to the bathroom and look at their reflection, therefore it is unoriginal. Don’t get me wrong, you wrote it very well, that just stood out to me a lot for some strange reason.

    Keep writing though! (:
    July 1st, 2010 at 07:24pm
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