Once Upon a December - Comments

Emilise284 (100)

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Okay, so here's the criticism you so desire (don't worry, a smiley face will come afterwards!)...
For one thing, one of the most important things involving a story is PROOFREADING!!! Spell check will pick up misspelled words, but it will not pick up words used incorrectly. In one case, I saw you using "burrow" instead of "borrow." :) Another mistake you often make is forgetting articles or pronouns. You mostly lack the word "she" when describing an action or the like. :)
OTHERWISE, I love this story! The idea is so fascinating (and I like the layout, too)! Oh, another thing: in the 11th chapter, you mention 3rd generation vampires; I think you mean 1st...
And that's it!!! Please update soon!!! :-)

December 31st, 2011 at 09:47pm

Bluecaty15 (100)

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i like the story so much! I hope alec is okay! I hope Sam doesn't give in to the temptation called lust! I hope anastasia and edward have a happy life, but one quick question. Did edward ever offically breakup with Bella?

July 21st, 2011 at 08:28pm

MissAlice (100)

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looks cool!

May 4th, 2011 at 01:55am

Mikey Whiskey Hands. (100)

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<3
Loved it.
I can't wait tooooo see how Alec's character
reacts to everything.

May 3rd, 2011 at 01:03am

hazel eyes (100)

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interesting hope to read more soon^_^

December 9th, 2010 at 03:55am

redda (100)

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O lala.. I can't speak french so deal with that...lol... LOVE the UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!! soooooo...UPDATE!!!! I want to know what's going on with Sam and Ana... XD *smiley*... my friend gave me suigar so now im hyper so Im chekcing all the stories im subscribed too...*random*..longest ive ever commmented on a story...XD...lol
BYE!!!!!!!

December 5th, 2010 at 12:12pm