Wow, that's a boatload of plottwists for one chapter. But really cool. Spiced up the story. :) I hope jaylee and jaydee grow closer, the poor girl might just go crazy. Question: did you guys base and of the characters off of anyone???
It didn't hook me as much as I wanted it to be, and you'll need to work on some grammar issues, but otherwise, I feel this has great potential and is a good start to a great novel! Don't give up and keep writing. :)