When Boys Mean She's Protected - Comments

Absolutely divine layout. Okay, so is there high school called Scarlett-view? 'Cause if so, I think "high" needs a capitalised 'h'. Also, there should be a comma after the word '"high" itself. There's a bit when you said "I" instead of Noah, "Ruby's mouth spread into a grin as she flung herself unceremoniously into my arms with a squeal." Overall though, the story was really well developed and I loved the ending because it was utterly heartbreaking that Noah doesn't get Ruby when he's been doting on her the entire time. I think you just need to proof-read the chapter, because of some simple mistakes in grammar. Another example I noticed was towards the end, when Noah's mom says Ruby is "so beautiful" there's a period after the word "beautiful", but it should be a comma. Hope I was helpful. Recommending!

First off, I love the layout! It's gorgeous. Simple, but elegant and very beautiful. The quote also captures the reader's attention. I love the way you write. Noah's adorable, how he protects Ruby and all is so cute.

I really quite liked this story. The characters were well developed and so seeing this "only-friend" relationship between the two characters was really painful. Considering as much as dear Noah dotes on Ruby, the prospect of being blind to someone who adores you and everyone else can see this, it really takes a toll on the heart.

Overall I really, really enjoyed it! The story a much needed read.

I could tell within the first couple paragraphs that Noah was in love with her and Ruby didn't know it. Even though you never outright said it, it was obvious. I liked the way he took care of her, it was sweet.

I liked the story. I wish I met someone like Noah.

This was amazing, i think you should write a little squeal to it redoing the story through Ruby's eyes. I would kill to read it! You did a great job!!

Such a sweet story, I love it.

This is the prettiest story ever
its pretty much perfect