Memento Mori - Comments

oh my Jesus, I really don't think it's him.
I have a feeling he might have tracked down the same thing Alaina was tracking down...
or maybe not.... maybe he was coaxed into doing this, or hypnotized by some unearthly strong vampire.
reallly, all I have to say about this chapter is that you need to punctuate more. like I've been saying.

im glad you updated :) but u dont need to rush. the blood and guts was intense...in a creepy/nasty way. but i get it cuz its a vampire story + im not gonna stop reading cuz its really good. so i hope this comment was good for ya.

omg i was like ohhhh and then i was like ahhhh and then i was like OHHHHHHHHHH and then i was like Dammm girl.

lol
Yep.

I loved this so so so so so much, shits really starting to happen now lol.
Cannot wait for an update, so that means you have to do one soon cause me and bump need somthing to read LOL
love you
xxx

your writing skills are fantastic, and i understand your obstacles of school and work and everything else. yes, i just found this story out of random and it looks really interesting so i read it. i love it so far. but one thing: please dont kill of Wes! i like his character a lot. well, this writing gave me a lil push to write, and that is what i will do. thanks for writing and helping encourage me to write with ur amazing writing skills. :) - Loran

ohhhhh who is it!
I like what boats and birds. said about it being the person Alaina's looking for i did not think of that till she said it lol good thinking.
Once again i will say i am loving this!
And so is baby bump :)

Looking forward to more.
xxxx

I think the killer's that guy Alaina's looking for. :x
Steven's a bloody asshole, but I still love him.
August seems a bit abrasive, yes? Almost like you're trying too hard. ;D
Remember punctuation!

Truly the only place a human was safe from a vampire attack was in these dark, infectious alleyways, scorned by man and God. I love this line, btw.

I have not been able to get one long enough to read this for so long and i feel so guitly for that!!!

I love this love this love this so much!

I cant wait for an update.
Was it winter that killed the person?
Is he gonna be all baddy?
He is hott LOL
More more more!
I cant belive they are brother and sister and she turned him into a vampire lol but then again she was pissed so who can blame her.
I feel so sorry for her going back and seeing her family had moved on :(
I hope he find out that she is his sister and they make up that would be sweet.
Or he could just rip out her neck LOL
Love you babe
x

they're all so... I can't think of the word.
menthol cigarettes though. <3
menthol cigarettes.

I'll get better with punctuation this year in school!

I'm still convinced about August.
I feel like Alaina needs to lighten up.
Don't forget punctuation, Trevor!

ohohohoho.
Is August Night's maker?
I'm convinced she is.
That vile woman. ;D

OHHH it was really intersting to learn how they became vampires.
And poor winter not knowing anything about vampires he is so sweet.

Awh, poor Ara.
I still enjoy Steven. :]
my favorite character so far.

I fucking love Steven. :x
but he does have a bit off a potty mouth, lmao.
I can't wait to see about Winter.

okay so i just decided that Winter is my new Dave.
I just have this imgine of him being all sexy and yummy and sexy and omg.
I like him very much.
LOL
I am such a slut with your characters its not even funny lol.

But i must say i will pick my man over Winter and Dave anyday lol Thats how in love i am right now.
LOL
Can't wait for some more of this babe.
Its great
:)
x love ya x

I love this more and more with each part i read lol.

I love Steven already.:')

“I have to fuckin’ side with August on this one. You two are always up each other’s fucking arses yet Elias here always has to get a visit madam palm and her five sisters.”
made me laugh.
Pretty witty, if you ask me.

oooo,
I like this.
keep going!

OHHHH me wanna know who this vampire she is looking for is!
Is he hot lol.

I really enjoy reading this like crazy lol.

I love me some vampire.

love it.

Ohhh i like very much.
You need to update woman!
I am so glad that your writing somthing again lol
I have nothing better in my life to look forward to hahaha.

love you