Get Crunk - Comments

I liked it.
Overall it was a good plot, though it kind of felt like you were just telling a story.
I know that's kind of confusing, but many readers like to feel and see the story. Not literally, of course.
I guess what I'm trying to say is a little more detail added?
Not to sound like a perv, but a lot of people who read smut (so many, many people on here xD) like detail in the sex scenes. So tell what they're feeling, their sounds (grunts, moan, mewls, etc.) and describe everything from the sweat beading down their face to the toenails on their toes :3
Just a little constructive criticism to help your stories get better[:
I loved it though. It was very feisty(;

i can't believe no one's commented!!! i never read slash, but i thought i'd try something written by you since i like your work (that i've read so far anyway lol) and yeah this was pretty cool. i think you should probably change the font colour so it's a bit easier to read, since the grey is kind of dark. i'd like to know what's up with the title tho lol