Life, Love, Death? - Comments

This is really good. Really enjoy the quotes at the beg of the story.

It's a really great story. And it feels like you have experienced it yourself on the way you describe thing. Goog job!

This is really good! Keep up the good work!

i really liked it :) i thought the emotion was just fine
keep it up :)

See Dani?
All these people love it! Told you it was awesome, don't give up on it, you're too talented for that!
Keep it all up!

- Glen x

I really like this and am very interested in seeing where you will take it next. I disagree with you and I find that the second chapter shows a lot of emotion too. Maybe less than the first but thats the reason I really love this story. It's like getting stuck in her brain and being able to know all about her.

I am really curious to see what the accident actually is.... but I don't know if the story actually ever wants us to find out. Also the scar is very puzzling...

I don't want to be picky but in chapter two you wrote
'This seats are amazing don't you think, Freya?'
I think you mean:
'These seats are amazing don't you think, Freya?'

Great story and cannot wait to read more!

wow I really really like this. You are a very talented writer. I like the way you narrate things. This is an interesting story, I shall be subscribing now :)

Oh wow, I just started it.. It's very informative, which is good. I love stories that cover so much. But it's extremely sad! =/ I can't wait to read more... Sad, but addicting lol.

YEAH. I gotta say, I've skimmed through most of your stories to figure out which one was good, and I found this one to be the most easy to read and best written. I think you should go on. I do agree with Caravaggio though - her tips are pretty amazing. :)

Good luck in writing and your experiment!

loved it, whats next in your story!

Alright. Finally on to this one! XD It's been a long night of sugar highs and childish fighting with my friend. But, now I've got Doctor Who on and five cups of coffee at my elbow, so I'm quite ready to review this!

So, I think I like this story the best out of all of yours I've read so far. The beginning narration is phenomenal. The way that you describe how she feels, and the way that she reacts is great. But then, when you find out that she's the only one alive still after just one accident, makes it a bit harder to believe. I start to think that it has to be a supernatural story, when there's not yet any proof of it's being so.

Another thing that I would say could use some work is Freya's reactions toward the end of the chapter. She begins to get a bit more irrational, which is alright. But the way it's done is a bit choppy, and it makes it less believable. And, I also found it really hard to believe that her aunt had no idea who she was. I could see at first her being confused, but Freya's face hasn't changed at all, and I'm assuming her aunt knows her better than what this implies.

Anyway, as I have said, I do like this one more than the others. The set up is great, and it seems like it's going great places. If it's a supernatural story, I think it will be even better, as the set up is perfect for that.

Again though, it needs some work with formatting, grammar, and typos. Also, if you need an editor, I'm on Christmas break at the moment, and I would be happy to help you out.

I love this a lot. Like get a room said in their comment, your emotion is incredible, it gives me a new perspective on things, because I know that's not how I would react if my parents and my brother died. But I love how you've made Freya and her aunt and I love how you write them, you have an amazing voice in this story.

I loved it. It was really good.
I want to read more!

wow.
this was amazing.
the emotion, and everything.
i really can't wait for more of this.
i see some talent here.

wow, that was really good. i got like chills and almost wanted to cry during the funeral part >.> and i like never cry

wow its really great! :)

I'm working on chapter 2 now. Its taking longer then I thought so for the meantime please check out my other stories :) xoxo

AWWW. this is sad!! :(

Amazing, truly.
'Tis you who has the talent darling.
I almost cried myself:)

OMG. this is amazing :)
im being serious.
i absoloutly love it.
Her emotions are strong, and i love the sound of her hair.
Also, Sympathy wont bring back her parents, this made me cry.
a good thing :)
please write more <3