Hello :) So sorry it took me so long to get to this. DX!!
Okay. Great job, and thank you so much for entering the contest. :) We both appreciate it. Just a few suggestions and evaluations. :) First off, it's a bit confusing, but I think that I understand most of it. The idea is very good, and you wrote it well. It was a bit hard to read, and I would have appreciated spacing between the paragraphs. Also, you had a few typos but nothing that can't be overlooked. Just be careful to look over the spelling, especially when it's a name. Also, I got a bit confused towards the end with who was talking to whom. You're main character seemed very sweet. I liked him. The endearing personality of a new friend. Gotta love it. Thanks so much again for entering and we'll be sure to let you know the results. :) Good luck. :)
So sorry it took me so long to get to this. DX!!
Okay. Great job, and thank you so much for entering the contest. :) We both appreciate it.
Just a few suggestions and evaluations. :)
First off, it's a bit confusing, but I think that I understand most of it. The idea is very good, and you wrote it well. It was a bit hard to read, and I would have appreciated spacing between the paragraphs.
Also, you had a few typos but nothing that can't be overlooked. Just be careful to look over the spelling, especially when it's a name.
Also, I got a bit confused towards the end with who was talking to whom.
You're main character seemed very sweet. I liked him. The endearing personality of a new friend. Gotta love it.
Thanks so much again for entering and we'll be sure to let you know the results. :) Good luck. :)