Jesus, Mary and Jane - Comments

I don't know much about religion or pot, but this was definitely an interesting read. c:
I love the descriptions and especially this line, "he plucks a fire engine red Bic from a dazed girls fingers. "
Great job and good luck in the contest. (:

I really liked this. (:
I agree that maybe you should change the italicized words to capitalized, but it's your choice.
I also like how you didn't come right out and say Jesus, but stuck to simple words like he, his, him.
I think it gives the whole story a good effect. It fits with the imagery you've created.
This is great.

I do believe this is best thing I've read. :)
I like the way you described things.
It's very simple and yet, I like it a lot.
:)

-kayt

The two things I wanted to say.
You missed a lot of him's and he's- like I mean for italicizing.
Also, I think that whole him, he, his, would have an even bigger effect if you capitalized them.

I'm not a big know-all when it comes to religion or drugs, though I am Christian.

But seriously, this was beautiful.
I hate the idea of drugs, I won't lie.
But the way you worded it was perfect.

Dude, this is amazing.
I'm not religious, but I do know my pot *cough*
I think you dealt with this idea really well, you've written it so well and I could really picture it.
Excellent!