Wake - Comments

This was sort of creepy, but in a really good way. The descriptions were flawless, as usual, and I think it ended quite abruptly, but it worked really well.
This kind of reminded me of that feeling you get when you are in a lucid dream, or just waking up in the morning in an unfamiliar place; that moment of confusion of what is real and what isn't.
Once again, your writing was lovely.
Keep writing, please.

The picture was really pretty(: and the story was good

Wow. This was absolutely beautiful.

Your description, my dear, is simply gorgeous! I adore your use of noun phrases and some of the vocabulary you use, combined with the flow of your writing, make it sound almost poetic. One of my favourite lines was:
"Her hands twitched, her eyes fluttered; yet she did not wake. Her surroundings felt almost ethereal, the ground beneath her just a ticklish reminder of the ground itself."
I especially liked the second half, but I felt like I had to include the first half as well because it's that lovely. The whole phrase seems to be a metaphor for simply just being. with the ground there simple for the sake of being there.

Your use of language is also incredible. I love the insertion of the onomatapoeia, and the rhetorical question used withing the first paragraph. It doesn't only sound like the character is questioning her existance, but seems to have a deeper, philosophical meaning about life in general.

It's absolutely stunning!

Love, love, love, love it.

The description was perfect, drabbles seem like they would be hard to get a description for, being as they are so short., but you nailed it.

I wasn't quite sure where she was, or why she was waking, but I loved that about this. It lets my imagination run wild and I'm sure that I'll be coming up with little scenarios for it for a long time coming.

You have great description without it sending awkward or anything. It's flawless, and I must admit, I'm jealous! Ha, but seriously, I really enjoyed this.

At first I thought she was in a tomb or casket and she was still awake. That is an extremely scary situation, be reading on, I see that she is not.

I've come to the conclusion that perhaps she was in a coma or something very close in nature? Anyhow, I'm glad she woke up.

I'm glad that you title this 'Wake' also. It's a short word, but I find it to hold a lot of force behind it.

Great job! I also loved the layout and banner. I feel like there should be a prelude or something next. But that's good though, because it leaves me wanting more! :)

That drabble was absolutely gorgeous. Even though it was short, it certainly held a massive amount of power and emotion which was conveyed expertly. You really did a wonderful job with this.