This story is pretty cool. All you need is to do a little more explaining on some parts, but its kinda like a three chaptered story so I didn't really expect that much explaining, but I was with you the whole story. It was actually pretty good. When I read the last part; which is really sad, and you started talking about Brian's song I was like "Omg! I need to listen to it!." So I am now listening to that song. This plot line is really interesting and sad. I enjoyed reading this story!!
How can you say that sucked?!? Your making me jeoulos... Loved it!..can't wait for more and see where its going. Cuz I have no clue right now. >.< Zacky Rules!