July 21st, 2010 at 12:21am
Aw I loved this. Poor Rachel. D:
I like the part where Rachel goes on and on about why she was crying, she would so do that.
Speaking of things that make her happy, Puck is still there, overprotective and Puck-ish as always.
And of course, this made me giggle. :)
But I still enjoyed reading it, it were nice seeing a story about just friendship between girls, without it focusing too much on the drama in the past, just showing that it's there, and focusing more on the now.
verprotective and Puck-ish as always
This had me giggle, even though not knowing who Puck were
but it’s nice to be nice to the girl
I'm not really fond of the repetition of 'nice' so soon after each other, it stops the flow of the story for me.
While I am grateful for your sudden friendship, I don’t know if the others are quite as accepting
This might be just me, but this line seems a bit... forced. I don't know if this is the normal way for Rachel to be talking, but it seem sort of old fashioned for a teenager to say.
Those are the only things I really have to comment on, otherwise I fully enjoyed reading about their friendship, and I feel so sorry for Rachel being in such stress, poor girl :/
Great job, sweetie ^^