It's Just Me, Roland and Ivan. - Comments

Comment swap sent me! Right off the bat I know that you writing this from her point of view. I like that. I like how you show exactly how most fourteen year old in this time and day think. I am having a hard time finishing it though. I cannot stand how immature these kind of girls are. You wrote it perfectly. I’m sorry I couldn’t finish it. Ha, I seriously can’t stand fourteen year old thinking. You did a good job though! Keep up the good work!

Hello, I'm from the Comment Swap--you just commented on my story :)
A very interesting concept right off the bat, and I love the flawed logic in this fourteen-year-old girl desperately wanting a child and defending her boyfriend. There are some punctuation issues, so just pay careful attention to that.
“You’re fourteen!” my mother yelled.
“So what?!” I yelled back.
I felt my heart drop; did she really ask me to choose between home or my baby? This couldn’t be happening for real.
The mother never says anything about choosing between home and baby.
It's definitely written like Roxy the teenager would tell it, and I love that. It's very interesting!

From comment swap:

Okay im going to be honest. Im against this whole teen pregnacy stuff. Also more than half of the guys leave. Also in my opinion building a family at the age of 14 is a little crazy.
But now, im judging the story without all that. So, I reallyyu really enjoyed it. I loved the whole face on the word love vs se.x. i really do!! Good job! I also like that their relatio.ship was one in a million!! Very well done in making the reader feel what was going on! I alsooo love the fact that you made real life situations on what couple problems they could have! Overall, story is very well writeen and hope you do good on the contest!!! =)

i have a sudden feeling that ivan wanted a baby more for the experience rather then for love. and roxy needs to stand up for herself more often. but overall i love your story! XD keep up the good work!

Well Roxy certainly has her head in the clouds, I kind of would have liked it if Ivan would have left her. It seemed it parents were the only semi-logical ones in this story.

I would like to agree....with the agreement......I loved this story, it was amazing....

I totally agree ^.
I loved it though! (:

Aww, man this was so sad and beautiful, all at the same time.
I first thought that Roxy and Ivan were a cute couple, but then as the story went on, I kept thinking Ivan was going to leave her, like get her pregnant on purpose and leave her so she would be called a whore.
But then I realzied he wouldnt leave her, and then He turned in to a manipulative ass a little ass.But I gotta hand it to Roxy, she is a great mom.