July 25th, 2010 at 12:45am
Confessions of an Angel - Comments
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Wow. I love the repition; it really makes the story mean something. Like, that's the most important thing and the reader has to know it. I really liked this. <3July 20th, 2010 at 06:03am
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I really love this!
There was alot of though put into it and I admire that.
I really like it!
Keep it up!July 18th, 2010 at 05:41am -
I loved this! It was absolutely amazing and mysterious.July 18th, 2010 at 04:08am
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This was just simply amazing. More dialog would have been nice but it was really good either way. It sounded kind of twisted, like...They both were sort of crazy or something. xD The way they kept repeating words. Otherwise this was just really good. n.nJuly 17th, 2010 at 02:55pm
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I kinda love this story.July 16th, 2010 at 06:25am
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This is a really interesting begining. This looks like a very cool concept.
I must say I feel like it's a lot of personal thought, maybe add some more dialouge.July 16th, 2010 at 02:59am -
You better be proud, because you are sooooper talented to put this together. I'm glad I read this, it is very good. :)July 15th, 2010 at 07:43am
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This is GREAT!! I love it! You're such a talented writer!July 15th, 2010 at 07:36am
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I read them both, yes I am that quick of a reader. XD
And I really dig it.
You've got that kind of style that draws in the reader.
And your detail is just right at the line of awesome. I think you could do a bit more and I may bow down to you.July 15th, 2010 at 04:31am -
I really liked it your a great writer.
It took me a little bit to understand it.
A few moments but I got it aha.
I really love it though, they both have extremely different points of view and you showed thatJuly 12th, 2010 at 04:28am -
I really liked this :]
I liked the style you wrote it in.
Great job :]July 11th, 2010 at 08:29am -
After I re-read this, carefully picking apart everything, aha, I really
enjoyed it. (:
This was amazing.<3
I liked the background and the banner as well.
Fabulous job. (:July 11th, 2010 at 08:07am -
Its hard for me to understand but I did really enjoy it.
The first two chapters are like a mystery. :)
This is what I got from reading it;
There were two guys, one thought the other was an angel but he was not, and he killed him, because he thought he was an angel but he really was not.. Or, they were together, and gay, and the one boy looked at the other boy as an angel because he loved him. He accidentaly killed the other boy.
I don't know, but it flowed well and I liked that you had a banner for it. :)
Great job. :)July 11th, 2010 at 05:34am -
As usual, you've accomplished greatness through writing (:
I can honestly say that 1) I have no idea what's going on here and 2) I like it.July 11th, 2010 at 04:59am -
I like it. It's really out there, but there as well. I think you put a lot of thought into this, and it probably wasn't easy to write this.
The first chapter I didn't get all too well because it changed from one thing, and then said another. I liked it, but it confused me a little.
The second chapter I liked, and I liked that last sentence the most.July 11th, 2010 at 04:27am -
Well, as said before, it's a-fluffing-mazing. Pete and Patrick both have extremely different points of view, which is sometimes hard to capture in a multiple POV story.
It's almost like you're barely telling the story, leaving so much out, but describing the bits you tell extremely well. And... it just works for you.
Your could just /feel/ this radiating off the screen.
I loved it, and still do.July 11th, 2010 at 04:26am -
Just... wow. I'm having a hard time picking my jaw up off the floor.July 11th, 2010 at 04:21am
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And now I've just read the second one. It's really good!
I think that you're a really good writer. You've applied a lot of effort into this. :)July 11th, 2010 at 04:11am -
I really loved this. I liked the how their confusion and distress showed through this. Great job =]July 11th, 2010 at 04:11am
The narration style is incredibly interesting and fits well with the flow of the characters' thoughts.
I noticed a few typos, nothing huge. Also, I got a little confused with both points of view, because they sound so much alike... I just have this little recommendation: try giving each one of your characters a distinct voice, that way the readers won't confuse one with the other. You can keep that amazing, rushed style that you have right here, and add a bit of more depth to your characters by giving a distinct characteristic to each others' voice.