With A Mission. - Comments

[Chapter 16]

I think I have fallen in love with this story, even though I have not read it all. You did a fantastic job letting the reader into the mind of your character.

The only thing I found was:

I didn’t kick my clothes off, and I didn’t worry that my from door was still open.

I think from should be front.

That chapter was really good.
The layout, I must say, is amazing. Simple, yet tasteful.
Your detailing is off the chain, I know it's a gay thing to say, but it's that badass. (:
I also love your style of writing. It's... It's hard to explain, but I like it. I also like that it's written properly and clean and not sloppy and confusing.
I found no misspellings and punctuation errors. W00T!
Great job. (:

killer is in my sig! please comment! :)

ur not the only one who loves it! i do too!

it was great and detailled but the chap wasnt too long which made it all the more better. haha i hate really long chapters

your an amazing writer! keep it up!

I just felt like telling you I'm still in love with all these little chapters and they're brilliant. :) You have an amazing way with words and ideas, dolly.<3 c: Fabulous Job

Oh wow. That was a powerful chapter. Brilliant.

Heroin is such a difficult drug to write about, seems it's something that so many of us have little to no experience of, hopefully, anyway. But this was so realistic, so raw and truthful. It was absolutely excellent - so powerful.

I'm definitely going to check out the rest of this story, your writing is fantastic =]

Oh.My. Gracious.

This update was suprisingly startling. Not the fact that it was amazing, (that doesn't surprise me one bit. ;) ) but the fact that it was about such a subject. You depicted it nicely and really deeply.

I also really liked the ending sentence. It just wrapped everything up like it's supposed to. C:

Excellent Job. :D
<3

Okay, that last chapter was so, SO descriptive! It really was amazing how vivid it was, and how I could picture everything. The emotion put in, was also marvelous. You're a wonderful author, and I adore this. (:

This is brilliant. <3
I love every single thing about this - I'm subbing.
Your details are amazing, everything is as vivid as can be. You're writing is magnificent, as well. (:
Great job! :D

D: It was uber sad.</3

Haha, out of all the chapters I read, one just stuck out to me. Sweet. It was amazing because I was expecting something seriously cute and then she's like, "Refund!" D: It just broke my heart, aha.

Your details rocked as always and I don't think I've ever read a chapter like that let alone a story.
Rockin' Job as always (: <3

Wow, this is amazing :)
I love it :D
Subscribing :)

._. Is it bad that I could only find one thing wrong?

Honestly. xD I read chapter two about five times over, and only found one thing that I'm not even sure is wrong.

I loved her, what else could I do?

Maybe after her it could be a period? xD That was literally the only negative thing I could find. :'( Quite sorry.

>.> This is brilliant.
I've never read anything like this, before. I'm actually going to subscribe.

The first chapter was very... strong, I'd like to call it.

Makes me look back, and think - I should've done that!

Hope sounds like a smart girl, to me.

And now I keep reading.

Originally, this was just going to be a quick comment swap, but then I really got into it, so I decided to read all of them since they're pretty short.

Chapter one. I loved this line: I know it’s been a few years, and now that I have aged and grown wise, I can see that I never made a mistake with you. I just made a lesson.
Chapter two. I really loved the idea of it, the repetition of I loved her, what else could I do?
Chapter three. It was nice to see a story where someone doesn't want to be so deathly skinny. It seems to be a trend lately to write about anorexia, but it was nice to see a normal person's mindset, someone actually thinking properly.
Chapter four. I liked the opening line. It pulled me in.
Chapter five. Really unique.
Chapter six. ..but God has a plan, and I'm not in it. I loved that line. This one made me feel emotional.
Chapter seven. I've never seen any thing like this on Mibba before! Haha, it did make me feel bad for the puppies.
Chapter eight. Love isn’t real. It never was. This line makes my day. I really relate to this piece, because it's the same thing I'm always trying to tell people. Haha.
Chapter nine. It was faint, slow, and skipped a beat. Her heart was losing the battle, faster and faster each day the clock ticked. Blood trickled in and out, gushed around, and then stuck to the side of her shallow heart. I loved this part. “It’s called dying, Christopher,” she whispered to me. And this. I really liked this piece, but the end made me really sad. :/
Chapter ten. Clouds were his distraction, alcohol was mine. I liked that line.

By the way, I also like the layout. :) I'm subbing.

I think this might be my favorite one yet. I just feel like the alcohol thing at the end wasn't needed.

This idea is brilliant. (:
The layout, writing, details, emotion - it's all perfect! I love how I could feel all the emotions in this. (: I'm glad that I read this. (:
Great job! (:

I felt this last chapter was hard to follow. Maybe it was just me, but I got lost a lot.

Amazing updated. Great emotion.

I liked the first two and the fourth. The imagery is really good.

First off, the layout is very enjoyable to the eyes.
Second, your writing leaves me speechless.
So much detail. . . so much emotion.
I almost cried a little.
Please, update this again soon.
It's beautiful. :')
You have a skill for this.