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This is so cute Tara! You've got awkward!Snape down perfectly and a sort of motherly!Lily that I can really imagine. It's realistic and just how I would probably go about in that situation if I was forbidden from seeing someone. Codenames ftw :D

I think this might be one of my favourite Potter based stories I've ever read. You're writing is flawless, I loved the characterization and the descriptions most of all. A really, really good peice.

Sorry it took me so long to get to this. I wasn't on Mibba for like a whole week I'm not very good and big and drawn out comments but I really adored this piece.

I love your use of descriptions and writing style

Your writing is amazing. You told me that this was your first Harry Potter story, and you a really really REALLY great job for a first HP fic.

You should continue this. Maybe a follow up one one-shot. I would love to read more.

this was really beautiful. you have a real way with words that draws people in, makes them read more. i know i couldn't stop anyways.

the way they spoke to each other, you could just tell that they connected, that they were close.
and the way you described the fluidity of their movements and speech was done so perfectly. all the words chosen so carefully, and all of them fit right where they were supposed to.

i could sense in the way you portrayed sev looking at her that he wanted just something more, but didn't want to ruin anything either. you did a really good job on that front - him and his actions/emotions.

it was a really playful piece while at the same time still maintaining the seriousness of their figuring out a plan. all in all, it was wonderfully written. you should be really proud.

I really like this so far. It's very sweet--I love Lily and Snape stuff. I think you capture their personalities quite nicely. I especially loved how you described Snape leaning his head on Lily's shoulder. It was very vivid to me.

Keep it up, would you? :) I want to see what happens next.

Ah, Tara, one of your best for sure. Descriptions were spot on, and I love that you added James in for a bit. And getting Slytherin to win the House Cup. Priceless.
Lily and Snape fit together very well in this, thanks to your descriptions and dialogue. Flawlessly done, in my opinion.