Mannequin Bride - Comments

loveditlovedlovedit!!! :D

I love how...crual this entire story is. It's such a demented and epic idea. Well written too.

Could I just ask that you type in the name of the charecter who's narrating the chapter somewhere? Make it clear from the start.

GAH!! This one was too short!!! Bad Aya!!! lol...just kidding:D....<_<

Whohoo!! another update! :D

Not bad saya. although I'm confussed at how 3 girls can get taken on the same day o.o haha I hope we can find someone to take over Alastair. you did a good job but we need the different writting styles for each char it just seems to work better that way.

Hehe...I like this^_^ More please!!!!!!

woow! this chapter was really good u were really descriptive which is welly good cuz it help us readers understand the scenery and whats going on.
LoVeeee it!!! im gannaa keep reading!
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Omg! I totally get the 'talking dolls' now! lol. I knew somthin was off with that guy but now i know what! Aww I feel bad for those girls! and the boy! Awshum chapters!!!

Lol I agree with all of the above! Especially about it being a Awshum Horror film! :D I think its cool how the dolls 'talk' to him! Its creepy and cool at the same time!!! :3

Chapter One;

I love this story, it's an interesting beginning! Kind of weird and scary, which I love. I shall definitely read more and comment! >:D

Yeah, this story is slightly creepy... The writing is pretty good though. I would love to hear more but I am also reluctant at the same time because of the eerie plot I see so far... This would make a terrific horror film

Are the dolls "talking" to him?

This seems like one scary story, but awesome at the same time.