12- [color=# 3772A9] is in a random paragraph 13- I believe you mean "pompous" not "poppas" 15- you've been writing "witch" instead of "which" for the entire story so far . 21- You also constantly write "tare" instead of "tear" 23- it just turned from "Jesse" into "Jessie" in the last few chapters. Do feel free to pick one. As with the person below, I like the end of the story. The Cullen child must be how Adele is linked to the other story.
October 29th, 2012 at 06:27am
