These Rusted Gates - Comments

Buggeration!:

It's ... fuck. It's amazing. The description is unreal, the ending pulls you in so much!! You have talent. Being brutally honest, I actually copy/pasted the first two paragraphs and googled it, just to check that you didn't copy it off a successful author.

I don't mean for that to cause offence, it just means that I thought that this is so good it sounds like a best-selling author wrote it.

I'm hooked. Like I said, description is AMAZING. So intricate ... You really brought life to everything. I WANT TO KNOW WHY SHE IS GOING TO DIE SO BADLY.
Just ... my God!!! Update ASAP. Please?!

EDIT: I have now recommended it on the Pimping and Reccing thread.

And subscribed.

Scandulous Role Play:

You're a very good writer - slash that.
Your fucking a genuis!

The way you described everything was very breath taking.
I love the first two paragraphs. It was just descriptive.
You have your ways with words & that's an amazing gift.

You're very creative at this - I realllly super de duper love it.
No doubt or or lie.

What they said, counts for me too :shifty

You're a very good writer - slash that.
Your fucking a genuis!

The way you described everything was very breath taking.
I love the first two paragraphs. It was just descriptive.
You have your ways with words & that's an amazing gift.

You're very creative at this - I realllly super de duper love it.
No doubt or or lie.

Buggeration!:

It's ... fuck. It's amazing. The description is unreal, the ending pulls you in so much!! You have talent. Being brutally honest, I actually copy/pasted the first two paragraphs and googled it, just to check that you didn't copy it off a successful author.

I don't mean for that to cause offence, it just means that I thought that this is so good it sounds like a best-selling author wrote it.

I'm hooked. Like I said, description is AMAZING. So intricate ... You really brought life to everything. I WANT TO KNOW WHY SHE IS GOING TO DIE SO BADLY.
Just ... my God!!! Update ASAP. Please?!

EDIT: I have now recommended it on the Pimping and Reccing thread.

And subscribed.

I totally agree with this person:P. it's very good, just some small mistake here and there. you are seriously an amazing author:P:P:D. Even people say I'm a good writer and have a few mistakes. It's okay:P.

Okay, it's very good, but there's just a few things that didn't make much sense, to me. "Midnight stars swirled around in the deep, gray sky; the sound of the busy street morphed into humming choirs of angels, ah the effects of a cold winter night crawling into the skin and slowly killing her." the paragraph was very well written but the "ah the effects of a cold winter night crawling into the skin and slowly killing her" didn't make much sense. just the "ah the effects..." part though. occasionally it looks like you want to write it from a point of view and not at the same time, so it sounds weird... like, you know? Like if he thought the "I have to find her" instead of speaking it, i dunno, you know? :P. If you just re-read it and stuff doesn't make sense, even to you, then you should change it:P. It used to happen to me all the time. still does occasionally. Anyway this is very well written, your a good writer,just need to edit you work a bit :D. I sound like an mod. haha lol. Anyway, please continue. Your a very good writer.

*GASP* So amazingly written, I wish I could write as well as you just did. Please continue with this story as it has so much potential.... and merry christmas <3

It's ... fuck. It's amazing. The description is unreal, the ending pulls you in so much!! You have talent. Being brutally honest, I actually copy/pasted the first two paragraphs and googled it, just to check that you didn't copy it off a successful author.

I don't mean for that to cause offence, it just means that I thought that this is so good it sounds like a best-selling author wrote it.

I'm hooked. Like I said, description is AMAZING. So intricate ... You really brought life to everything. I WANT TO KNOW WHY SHE IS GOING TO DIE SO BADLY.
Just ... my God!!! Update ASAP. Please?!

EDIT: I have now recommended it on the Pimping and Reccing thread.

And subscribed.