Love Knows No Boundaries - Comments

Comment swap brought me here. Hmm well, this story could have a very deep and meaningful theme, but it's a little lost in all the dialogue. The whole story is written in dialogue, actually. A little description would go a long ways. I don't even know what any of the characters look like, where they are or how they're feeling. Reading this is almost like listening to a movie with your eyes closed. The story also moves very fast for the length it is. The layout is pretty hard on the eyes as well. I think this idea could have potential if you slowed it down and spent more time describing the world around your characters.

I'm blind, I think I see the light now. Maybe tone down the white. I thought that you had a bit of a running leap into the story, and I think maybe a bit of detail would make all of the difference. I had no idea what was going on. I also think that maybe double spacing would be amazing. Also a few mistakes, like in chapter two TV should be capitalized because it is an abbreviation. I will read on in a few moments after I recover my sight. Also, if she tried to kill herself no way she is going right back to school. At least 2 weeks would be my best estimate (doctor's daughter).

Chey... You need to update this story.... no matter what happens.... I need to read it!

I love it! Write more and more! I want to read this until there is nothing left to read! I love it and you are so extremely talented! Never stop! Writing is where you belong, it is where you shine brightest. :)
Love,
Your Gay Best Friend Bobby. :) (Or Bobs :))

Whoa!
I am so hooked on this story!
Update soon!

Wow, I really like this, but it's sad too. I would like more :)

I want to know what happens next!

This is really good. :)
It was so cute and then... I HATE them. They can all go die. That is completely inexcusable.
She really needs to tell someone tho. Just saying.
But Koby will make it all better right? :)

dude... so sad!!! keep goin i want... wait i NEED to no wut happens... O_O

ugh how did i know that was gonna happen boys can be suchs pieces of shit
:P

Keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!

I loved this(:
Its pretty much a hook from the beginning
You're pretty creative,
Update quickly!

dude luv this keep going again!!

Go Chey! Keep it up, loving it!

haha ahmazing i luv it already keep it up :)

This is where you belong Chey... you habitat...lol
finish this... follow through... itst gonna be great...
wuv yew

I am really suprised that no one has commented!
So I really like this and I would love for you to continue!