Yeah I agree with Joe Kerr sweet but sad. And I really love how you put yourself into the characters ^^ I really enjoyed reading this, it was soo cute! ^^
August 29th, 2010 at 01:22am
This story is so sweet yet so sad. I really like how you pour yourself in your main characters; it's so obvious that you put a little of you in them.
It was a really sweet plot, the relationship of the two characters is easy to relate to, which is great because a great way to attract readers is to make themselves relate with your characters and their stories.
Again, the only thing that I noticed was the tense shifts, going from present to past; it can be really confusing for the reader. Just proof read your story before posting, so you don't encounter that problem again.