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  • Howl

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    Eee! Excitement mounting! Oh! Please put commas after e.g. "blah blah blah," she said. Or...She said, "Bla di blah." I'm sorry for nagging, it's just that when I see something out of the ordinary it breaks my concentration and the flow of the story is interrupted. Honestly, I won't give critique again; I know it's annoying.
    Over and out
    August 31st, 2010 at 07:21pm
  • Howl

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    Dammit. I meant murderous....
    August 14th, 2010 at 11:34pm
  • Howl

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    This is really exciting. I just would like it if you reread your work before posting it up; there are many spelling mistakes and you use the wrong words for what you want to say. E.g. Murderess should be muderous.
    But I'm totally subscribing and looking forward to the next chapter!
    August 14th, 2010 at 11:32pm
  • EllieBellie4lyfe

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    I really like the writing here, hope you keep up the story!
    July 18th, 2010 at 05:18am
  • Thelovelostbecka

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    Wow...Post more soon.!
    July 17th, 2010 at 08:25am
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