Colors of the Heart - Comments

Eee! Excitement mounting! Oh! Please put commas after e.g. "blah blah blah," she said. Or...She said, "Bla di blah." I'm sorry for nagging, it's just that when I see something out of the ordinary it breaks my concentration and the flow of the story is interrupted. Honestly, I won't give critique again; I know it's annoying.
Over and out

Dammit. I meant murderous....

This is really exciting. I just would like it if you reread your work before posting it up; there are many spelling mistakes and you use the wrong words for what you want to say. E.g. Murderess should be muderous.
But I'm totally subscribing and looking forward to the next chapter!

I really like the writing here, hope you keep up the story!

Wow...Post more soon.!