Of Lu, Lollipops and the Best Summer of My Life. - Comments

Well here's my attempt at a review:

Firstly, I would just like to say that this was amazing.
It was extremely well written and everything about it made me laugh or smile.
I loved to way you told about Lu's character.
He was adorable and sexy, both at the same time.
I also loved how you described the things he did and Simon' reacctions.
The sex scene was very detailed and steamy ;)

Overall, it was just a phenomenal story and you're a very good writer. =)

I don't want it to be a one-shot xD
Anyway, it was awesome! :D

not bad lol. I really liked Lu's personality. He was such a tease and its hilarious to see Simon's reactions to him xD

Oh love, you already know I love this so so insanely much <3 I want to hug Lu, and slap him, and marry him, and kick him, a little xD You already know my love for him :tehe:

Anyway, I like that you never really mention Simon's name at first, I don't even know why. At first I weren't really thinking about what his name were (but each having read it step by step, I were thinking more about what his name were). And I love Lu's name, that he's named after whatever-his-full-name-were xD

Lu's way of dressing up makes me giggle every time I read about it, for some reason the colorful hair pins makes me aw and giggle when imaging them xD

Lu groping Simon under the table, when his family is there... priceless! xDDDDD I wish I could have been there to see it :tehe:

Just... I love the whole damn story <3 It's so amazingly great, I love Lu being teasing, knowing that he's hot and that Simon find him extremely seductive, and uses it as much as he can – and that no one even seem to react on it 'cause they're so used to Lu's way of acting xD And I love how Simon are getting hard almost whenever Lu is in the room, how awkward he seem to feel most of the time, and really just wants to fuck little Lu's brain out.

Lu's brother is odd, for not noticing anything at all xD Or maybe he did notice, and just didn't bothered about it 'cause he knows how Lu is, and that no one can resist pretty boy <3

Lu sucking on the lollipop is pretty... hot sight, in a way :tehe: I can clearly imagined sitting and watching him, getting hard just by watching Lu ~innocently eating candy. And the popsickle... it makes me write story about Kitten eating popsickle and then licking his fingers to get the mess away, and Andy's staring and Kitten doesn't have any idea in hell that he looks totally obscene when doing it xD

The sex scene... it's great <3 Just amazing. I like that it's awkward and messy, and not superduper perfectly amazing, and I love that Simon thinks it's one of the worst kisses he've ever got xDDDD Poor Lu, really :tehe: The sex scene is great, because the reader can fully imagine exactly what's going on, and yet you're not putting more description than necessary, it's just perfectly done <3 I weren't sure how you'd pull off the thigh-fucking, but you did it really good, without focusing too much on why they're having sex like that, it were just natural, somehow.

Another thing that I love is that Simon isn't in love with him, but in lust with him, that makes it all so much better, in my opinion.

And Lu, precious, stupid little Lu <3 So teasing even after Simon left to college xDD

But at least he promised to give Simon just what he wanted ;)

I loved it so much, almost as much as I love you ^^ <3333333333333333333333333

Okay so I'll jump right into it ^^

Let's start with the banner and layout, the less important things. And I'm very happy to see this got so many readers in such a short time ^^ Lu is a magnet for readers, whether in my or your version obviously :P Anyway. So the banner is very nice! I like the title too :) Yay for the comment and dedications <33

The Lu you created here is lovable. He is so mischievous, so ... well, he had this Lolita-esque mystery to him. He is playing around with Simon, and the reader doesnt know if he is just teasing, or not... well, most probably he is, a 16 year old kid who's having fun. On the other hand, Simon is totally taken away by lust, it's like a prison for him in a way. I like the complicatedness of the whole thing, it had nothing of sentimental emotion, it had the darkness of the heavy emotions like lust, desire, obssession, Lu was haunting, the idea of him tortorous.

Popsickle too, sometimes, which was even worse, because he made sure it melted over his fingers and then he spent good two minutes licking them obscenely while gazing at me. -> You really managed to make Lulu a sinful little cutie in this story. He is a spoilt kid, soo spoilt. But then later, I was nicely surprised to see that he actually knows what he's doing. He has a plan :P And that while Simon is nothing but a mess of lust, Lu would actually like something more and... knows his own price,or maybe just knows well how to sell himself.

Lu was sitting between me and his brother, his legs stretched across my lap. He seemed to be engrossed in the movie, though, his eyes never moving away; actually the only notices that he wasn't dead were the occasional shifting of his legs, and the steady sucking on the cherry lollipop. -> lol i just love this mental image xD Funny yet sexy.

He wriggled on my lap and I snapped back to the present with a stupid: “Finally?” Christ. I couldn't be less charming. -> gotta say I like quite a lot also how you worked with the narrator. I liked how he narrated the story, his comments on what was going on. And the contrast between how perfect was Lu in his eyes, and how imperfect he considered himself to be, especially around Lu. Imperfect because he was sooo helpless agaisnt Lu's charm :p I also liked how there was this obvious dominant/submissive flavor.

My cock gave a kick at the thought, and then suddenly I had my mouth full of Lu, his lips and tongue, the traces of lollipop sweetness still obvious. The kiss was messy, sticky and one of the worst kisses I have ever got. -> in how imperfect it was for him, it was perfect for me ~~ That was a great kiss description ^^

Then another thing. I like a lot how Simon calls Lu names like bastard and stuff. Coz Lu totally deserves it for how he's playing around with him. What a kiddo. <3

"You can't fuck me" was one of my most favorite moments in the story. Total cliche break. And I just feel so put off by cliches, so seeing something like this makes a story hop many places higher in my eyes. It was a great twist. I liked how from what Lu said then, you gave more depth to his character. He isnt just the sinfully sexy playful, wicked kid, he is a guy who knows exactly what he wants.

From that moment on, there goes my favorite part of the story. Simon's angry reaction. Then giving away to Lu immediately, totally powerless in front of him.

He pulled his shorts down his legs far more gracefully than I'd expect, kicking them away and straightening up in front of me in his naked glory. I almost fucking came in my pants. -> you didnt describe Lu's naked body here, but you used the narrator's one sentence comment for giving better and more complex idea of how beautiful and irresistable the boy was then a I dont know how well written description would.

I pulled him closer to me, hiding my own nakedness with his. -> this sentence totally gave me a fangirl moment haha :D I loooove it. The metaphor in it <33

I wont go into detail about how hot that sex bit was. From the giggle/laugh, through wall and spunning around to Simon's hot comment and on. It was just so well written I wanna read it again. The fact it was not an actual sex but that it was what it was, another great cliche breaking. Loved that.

I pulled my arm from under him, his weight making the position uncomfortable, and shifted. “Lu?” But he was already asleep. -> another fangirl moment. This ... was great. Is this some kind of figure? I dont know what it is but aaa. It made the writer in me squeal happily.

He lay sprawled in the bed, his leg hanging down, his red hair messy as hell. -> the mental image <3 you just gave me a lot of happy moments with this story :D

The harmonica moment I loved of course :]] yay ^^ It was sweet image, Lu dressed like that and playing harmonica. I just loved how much childishness and sexappeal were mixing in him.

This story is one of my favs from yours :D

this was so touching and so amazing
i love it