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  • xLxOxVxEx

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    @ The Color Abi
    You didn't have to be so mean. Also, I wrote this story a long time ago so it was before Dujo really established the character pages.
    August 26th, 2012 at 03:10am
  • The Color Abi

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    You're not allowed to have links in stories. That's the first thing I noted the moment I opened the first chapter; Dujo created character pages for a reason.

    A second is that this layout is really hard to read. Bright green text on a black background? Yeah, that hurts eyes. Also, your chapter titles have no need for all the signs - you're able name them "One, two, ect" or "Chapter One, Chapter Two, ect" - this'll make the story look tidier.

    This story seems a pretty dragish; maybe you should work on making it a little more interesting.
    August 26th, 2012 at 02:59am
  • becketts-girl-333

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    Friggin love this story!
    February 2nd, 2011 at 02:56am
  • shaylove

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    ooooh ;D
    I want to seee... them start datinggg :D
    January 25th, 2011 at 05:00am
  • shaylove

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    Aww :D
    January 7th, 2011 at 11:51pm
  • shaylove

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    Merry Christmas to you, too :) and WOW. Alice seems to have to fix everything XD
    December 24th, 2010 at 04:31am
  • shaylove

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    Ooooh lust... kinky ;) hahahaha I love this :)
    December 19th, 2010 at 04:07am
  • shaylove

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    OH JASPER!
    I love this :) I can't wait for more :)
    December 5th, 2010 at 07:11am
  • Cosmic_Fae

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    What the eff! ;A; I hate cliff-hangers!
    Jasper isn't going to murder her, is he?
    Or is he taking her to Alice so she can murder her?
    OMG So many possibilities!
    November 18th, 2010 at 03:15am
  • Stab The Rainbow

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    Keep writing! ;D
    November 17th, 2010 at 02:28am
  • shaylove

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    Well I'm pretty sure this is the BESTEST (yes that is a word) Jasper story EVERRRR in the history of ever! :)
    November 16th, 2010 at 03:43am
  • Cosmic_Fae

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    Awwwww, poooo. (My thoughts on there only being 5 chapters so far.)
    XD This has a really interesting story line, and I can't wait to read more. c:
    -subscribes and hopes for an update within the next 2 weeks at most-
    October 9th, 2010 at 10:44pm
  • trinkeyk

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    Oohh this is great.Please update(:
    September 16th, 2010 at 01:01pm
  • Art_Flavor

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    update
    August 22nd, 2010 at 06:43pm
  • TrIkK BaBiI

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    You updated!! YAY!!!! haha, hurry and add some more!!!
    August 15th, 2010 at 11:35pm
  • TrIkK BaBiI

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    You updated!! YAY!!!! haha, hurry and add some more!!!
    August 15th, 2010 at 11:35pm
  • Vivid Dreams

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    Yay for a new chapter!

    Absolutley amazing and you've done a great job introducing the new characters!
    August 1st, 2010 at 04:58pm
  • ilikewalls

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    please keep this active its soooo good=]
    July 28th, 2010 at 02:04am
  • Vivid Dreams

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    Amazing I can't wait to read more
    July 19th, 2010 at 11:26am
  • Daniele Marie

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    I love it! The summary is awsome! It just makes me want to read more! Update soon, please!!
    July 19th, 2010 at 04:35am
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