Lacrimosa - Comments

reading again during my annual mibba revisit <3 you'll always be the best

Well, I read this in the wrong order, but still. Absolutly STUNNING! This one I acctually had a hard time not crying though. Everything you write seems so heart felt amd it really hits home. Lacrimosa is such a haunting and beautiful song and this story really plays on that. Just beautiful.

Definitely first place, no doubts there.

holy shit.
I just realized that this and Ingemisco
have the same exact word count.
you little genius.
and yes,
I know I stalk and re-read your works fiendishly,
but I keep noticing little things like that and must tell you...
:)

Beautiful. I absolutely loved it.

It was so well phrased, and the use of words and how you compared his playing the piano to him playing the main character. It was beautifully written, with perfect word choice and a captivating plotline that flows so perfectly through the letter. I did not expect that ending, though it worked out perfectly and made sense. It was filled with everything I love reading. This work is a true masterpiece. You should use this for something. Send it out to someone, or expand on it and get it published. It would work so well.

I am in awe of the talent and fluidity I see in your story. I loved it so much!

I'd just like to bring attention the the fact that this beautiful story
won First Place in my contest.
<3

And I have to add... I've just found the song Lacrimosa by Mozart (it's that one you meant, isn't it?),
I'm listening and reading English translation and marveling at what you did.
You didnt only create one new piece of art, but also gave new meaning to one already existing.

You know, amazing stories deserve amazing comments. But I don't know how to write one that would be appropriate to what you wrote. I really can't give an criticism, because I loved every single sentence you created to build this story. I just didn't want to leave it without a comment because it definitely deserves it.
You, for me, just became one of my favorite authors... and I dont think I need to read your other stories (but I definitely will) to be sure about it.

I guess you don't need sentimentality in comments, but let me mention that this story moved me very very much.

wow... that was just wow.
Regardless of your content, your writing is flawless, i'm just so impressed.
I loved the ending, I liked how you slowly peeled the layers away, and the endinng was stunning.
I can't top that last line.
Well done, I loved it.

I agree with Paige, it's hard to come up with words to describe how incredible that was. But I loved how you could literally feel the pain in the words, mixed in with all this love and hopelessness. Just holy shit. That was beautiful. Nuff said.

i loved this. it felt like one big, fatally accurate metaphor, and it was awesome. the last line had me laughing too :)

perfection times 3495759948756392374037

aaaaaaaaahhh why am I never the first to comment on these things. it's amazing, you're amazing, if it doesn't get first place then I'm going to go mental. safe.

I'm not going to bullshit you, it is definitely going to be challenging trying to come up with a comment that completely expresses every thought I had while reading this piece. There are just too many.

Wow.

Just...wow.

The title is absolutely perfect. I've personally attended a Requiem Mass, and the tone of this brutally honest story fits in prefectly with the emotion behind it. I'm going to be hearing that haunting melody playing in my head for weeks now, and believe me, I am certainly not complaining.

This story has to be one of the most gut wrenchingly honest ones I have ever read. The plot, the characters emotions, the ending--it's all so shockingly real. I have no idea how you managed to write a fictional story for my contest and make me feel as if I just opened up a book about my past. It is really quite amazing.

I didn't stumble across any spelling or grammatical errors, so nice job there. Proof reading is always greatly appreciated, along with a fierce streak of originality, both of which you no doubt posses.

"I realized, too late, that you didn’t just play instruments. You played my heart, like the keys of the piano you knew all the right ways to touch me, to make a song out of my feelings. It was a slow, aching song full of longing, missed connections, regret, remorse; of fights that ended in sex rather than conversations".

That is without a doubt my favorite line of the story. It describes and sums up the relationship between Jack and T.J perfectly. It reflects the heart breaking cycle of regret and longing that chases them around so hauntingly throughout the story.

By the ending of this, I felt as if I personally knew the two boys, almost as if I myself were actually going through a situation like that, of which i already have, and i must say that you depicted the confusing and painful emotional twists so perfectly.

You also managed to employ the theme of religion honestly, and it wasn't offensive at all. It didn't feel like I was reading a story written with the sole purpose of bashing the concept of religion. I felt as if I was reading into the lives of two boys who were caught in the middle of something too big that they had no control.

I really loved your characterization style, and writing technique. The layout was simple, and I adored the picture you used with the piano.

There are so many other things I could tell you, but I am going to leave you with bravo.

Well done, this was simply brilliant.

Thank you for submitting your entry in time, and good luck in the contest.<3

[Also, I apologize if this comment is poorly written in any way, I just had oral surgery and am a little out of it with pain meds.]

Cheers!

You wow me, every single time you write something.
And it's vaguely pissing me off that I can't find the right words for how much I liked this.
So just have fun knowing this is amazing. And that I fail at writing good comments. /:

Stunning story. I like that in the beginning there is this sweet tone and there is always this undertone of slight sadness. Letting go of people is never easy and you perfectly displayed that through this story. I like how the story ended, there was no groveling or begging to be taken back, but just letting go and it was him basically doing something for himself.