Falling From Grace - Comments

This is a really good story :) It's rather interesting. I was staring at the screen like O_O "HE IS SO NOT GOING TO DO THAT! HE ISN'T! ... HE IS! HE DID! OMG! NOOOOOO!"
XD But I'm just afreak liek that >_> haha.

*screams at the end of story* "AND THEN HE WENT TO HEAVEN AND PARTIED WITH THE ANGELS!" I really liked this story. I can understand his thoughts, cause I'm Christian and I feel really bad when I watch things that involve two penises, usually one inside a butt, so yeah, thumbs up!

I liked the layout, it was dark, which fit the story content.
This was well written, very few spelling/grammar issues.

I have to say, though, that the whole "this was not meant to offend anyone" bit is bull.
I view that as being a cop out for the inevitable anger you're going to invoke through writing this.
It makes you seem slightly weak, and like you can't take the retaliation for writing such a piece.
Just because you put a little note in the summary, doesn't mean your aren't going to offend anyone.
I'm very Catholic, born and raised.
I have never encountered anything negative involving priests, or any other religious leader in my community.
Therefore, I found your entry to be full of stereotypes and contradictions.
Why would the protagtonist commit suicide in order to atone for his sins?
Suicide is a major sin in itself.
I'm aware that you included that fact in your story, but it still makes no sense.
I'm by no means claiming to be a jesus freak, because I'm not.
I'm bisexual, and write about offensive things myself.
I would reccomend that you leave religion out of your future contest entries.

All in all,
you did a good job with structuring this entry, and making a nice layout.
I also liked the picture you used.

i bet he got molested by a catholic priest.
cant trust those sneaky bastards, going round and raping little boys.
thats why i'm not catholic, i'm smart like that.