Love It Before You Loose It - Comments

Thankyou! i love feed back! And that was the first layout i ever made :D

First of love the layout. This was really good, you made it seem real to were the reader can relate. The only problem is to space it out, don't have it one big paragraph. But over all this was really good :)

This is great Jess. <3
Your writing is so raw and real. This was beautiful and I loved it. :D

Constructive criticism would be the same as the comment below mine. If you ever need help with Mibba stuff come ask me. : 3

Comment Virginity. (:

Anyways, for the constructive criticism, I think you need to space it out more, use more description, and make sure all of the grammar is correct. If you want a shot at winning, you should make changes. You still have until August 11th. But, I do get what your trying to say. It would be hella alot better, if you would just use more description. <3

This is great, though.