The Sun-Observing Marigold - Comments

This was very interesting and it captured just about everything the adverage human does. I wish my neighborhood was like this. It would fun to people watch. Was this just one-shot or the first chapter?

Oh my God, this is great, just really, really great. First of all, I love how she calls them humans the whole time, even though she herself is one and I love how accurate this is! I mean even though all these things about people are completely true I just never would have sat down and thought about it before, and I’m so glad that you did. I love the almost factual feel to this, which I guess comes from the fact that she’s observing. This story was amazing, entertaining, witty, intelligent, well thought out, perfectly structured and just flat out enjoyable. I’m so glad I read it and even more glad that you wrote it! Great job on such a wonderful piece.

This is amazing, once again! I have no words for it <3

This was quite interesting. I like it. :)

This was beautiful. At first I was hesitant but I actually really liked the way you wrote this, it conveyed the emotions and flaws of being human so well. The repetition was also an interesting concept, it worked really well and allowed the different lessons to take form in a fantastic way.
I loved this, it really was humans in their purest form. I loved it. <3

That was really cool.
I loved how you explained all her observations and how you started most of the sentences the same. It was pretty awesome.
I really like the structure too, like Dr. said. It seemed well thought out.
I almost liked how you showed what the people did when they thought no one was watching. Like Andrew singing really loud while mowing the lawn. I can totally relate to that. xD

I liked the layout too. It was simple but it worked with the story.
I'll agree with the two people above me and say it was beautiful and brilliant.

Good job (:

I really liked this.

I liked the whole Humans, she concluded thing, along with the examples.

This is different from anything else I've read.

This was simply brilliant.

The layout is a tad plain, but it's not really that important. And the title is interesting.
:D

I love people-watching, I think humans are the most interesting things ever. The way people think, act, which is why I love this.

The Sun was still up,
Was that on pupose?

Gloria, the single mother who lived across the street, next to Andrew, checked her mailbox at noon sharp, every week day, although everyone, including her, knew that the mailman didn’t come until 3:00 in the afternoon.
Over abundant use of commas.

because Cassidy too was a creature of habit.
I adore that.

The entire thing was just so... beautiful. How you capture humans and everything.
I don't know what to say, it's brilliant, really.
:)

I agree with everything with Cassidy lol i dont really like andrew hes a meany lol But I love this

I agree with all the comments above ^
And I also love the way you wrote this. It seems very meaningful and it makes it even cooler for some reason that you wrote it while you were sick. Don't ask me why it's cooler, I just think it is.
But yeah, I really loved this :3

Omg this was hilarious. I totally can relate to the whole feel of what people wouldn't do when they are being watched. And since I find people amusing anyway, this was the icing on the cake.

I also liked the way you stared every paragraphs with "Humans, she concluded". It made it seem like an article that was pointing out facts. Haha I really liked this.

It seems that I've already commented this. I'll go read/comment something else of yours. (:

guurrl. what can i say? brilliant. and, dare i say, some familiarity? :)

This was written wonderfully. It's so very true to human nature, the way you described everyone's different behaviors. Spot on, this idea was just so perfect. Terrific job. :)

this is really well written and i enjoyed reading it.
It was kind of relaxing, good job,
Beautiful! ^.^

I loved this. (:
It made me laugh at times, just because it's funny how humans act when they don't think anyone's watching. You did an amazing job, on this. It was so well-written, and this idea was pure gold.
I'm glad I read this. :D

I love everything about this. The structure, how most started with the same bit, the way you wrote everything...
I just adore it. :3

He had grown used to Cassidy sitting outside every day, as had every other person that lived on Poplar Street, because Cassidy too was a creature of habit.

This was my favorite line for some reason. It was just perfect. This whole thing is perfect.
ksldaghlg I don't even know what to say, haha. You're a fantastic writer.

Cassidy even had learned humility a couple of times when various neighbors had caught her staring. Some looked away, trying to ignore her, while others stared right back.
I adore this part as well.

I'm so glad I decided not to be lazy and pass on the comment swap.

First of all, it takes some skill to pound out exactly 1,000 words. Kudos for making it clean-cut in that aspect of it.

lol.

I love the structure, too.

Cassidy.

Humans.

Humans.

Humans.

Humans.

Humans.

Humans.

Cassidy.

Masterfully thought-out. It was on purpose, right?

Anyway, this is very creative. I loved reading it. (:

The beer belly guy who's lazy kinda sounds like my uncle Pepe.

Cool story and your writing is great.

I kinda want to observe my neighbors, but I don't want to be the neighborhood creeper.

it was cute i liked it a lot :)