Hooked on You - Comments

I actually took a breath and swallowed and my chest is kind of hot and I'm a lil sweaty.... Am I having a heart attack? XD

This was very interesting. My favorite part was the beginning because of the cute romance of it, but the scary part was very welll-done. I'm more a romance fan, though. :D The piece was very well written, you write very smoothly and I never see any grammar mistakes which is a plus.

So I have no idea what this urban myth is about - my mind is a bit foggy, haha! - but holy hell, it was amazing! I also liked Rae from the beginning. And the radio broadcast was...yeesh, haha!
Sorry for the lame comment, lol! I'll continue reading and commenting everything you have (: <3

I really like this, even if it is a little cliche with the urban myth and such. The way you portrayed it, you did really well; it's tense and nervous, almost completely transporting you. It's great.

together* sorry spelling mistake.

I actually checked behind my back after reading this, and I put my feet up under me while reading it. D:

I thought you did a wonderful job creating the scene. It's very tense, and suspicious. I liked Simon, and Rae. They both sounded like they were in love, and they seemed so real.

Also, I loved the blood hook scene. It was very scary, and then at the end it just pulled everything in togetthr very well.

Your characters seem so realistic, the way they're described and how you, as an author, follow exactly what they're thinking. Except, during the adorable second paragraph, Simon sounds too good to be real.

I love the humour in this, and the tinge of supernatural. The combination of sci-fi and romance makes me want to bounce around the room.

I'm too scared for the next chapter. I'm not squeamish, but too much suspence! Scary as hell O.O

You handle suspence and tention very well, and I honestly didn't see that twist coming.

I love urban legends. That story was just awesome. You did such a good job of writing it in a way that wasn't cliche. Your horror stories always give me chills, this one included.

Agh! Dude, scary.
But this is amazing, I love it.
^ Like jezebel in hell; said, you should write more.
I love how you write. :3

GAH. -hides-

The moment I started reading this, Miss Murder came on, and I - legit - screamed. xD

We need more horror on this site. I'm greedy, I know - but can you maybe add another chapter to this? I'd love a sequel or something!

This was great. You're great.

Amazing job.

This made my stomach feel odd and I was so creeped out by it. o.o This was written amazingly, though. And I love at the beginning how she was wondering about if anyone was looking back at them. I love at the end how the man isn't there with the hook. At first I thought he was underneath the car or something and was going to jump out at them and kill them or something I was like "f**k" o.o and then it didn't happen. xD

At first I thought it was a love story, based on the title. I realize now it sort of isn't. o.o I really liked this, though.<3 I love getting freaked out. xD Cant wait to read more.<3

Whoa dude, that was insanely freaky. Even though it's a popular myth, I always love to read them over again :D And I loved your take on it. If you twist it up a little though, that would make it even better. Are you writing more? If so, I'm definitely subscribing. I want to see what happens!

This really got me tensing up!

I liked the character of Rae immediently, she was realistic and I adored how her mind wandered light years away.

As soon as a radio broadcast interrupted them, I knew there was someone else out there.

The ending was good though, I was nervously awaiting some sort of slaughtering, but I enjoyed it--very good. :D

I can't say I'm a huge fan of urban ledgends or creepy things, and that totally creeped me out.

The descriptions were all very well written and I liked your characters.

I just found one thing:
tyres once more crunching over uneven surfaces
Is tyres supposed to me tires or am I just insane? Aha.

I kind of laughed when Simon said "Don't touch it!" like that was the first thing she would have thought of doing to a bloody hook. But it was good to have a laugh.

Anyways, very lovely job. (:

I liked the banner thingie. I don't think the background color really went with it though.
You know I've never really read urban myths here. So you are my first! xD
This was really good. The realtionship between Rae and Si seemed really real which I liked a lot.
I don't know why but I laughed when Simon said "don't touch it," I don't know I'm just weird.

I was a bit on edge wodring if you were going to kill them off or something. You keeped me hooked (no pun-intended)

A M A Z I N G

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Oh gosh, if that isn't the most popular urban myth. XP

But you portrayed it beautifully. It made my stomach knot a little, even though I already knew the myth and what it consisted of. I just never know with you if you're going to suddenly kill them all in a bloody, gory mess. :P

Great job.