Time - Comments

Oh, Elcee. I adore everything you have ever written, you know that, don't you? The layout was simple and dark, although the shocking white on black made my eyes tingle a bit, I admit. Your grammar is perfect, your story is perfect, and your ending is perfect.

Your style is so fluid and elegant; brutally honest, yet sealed with a kiss. A sort of harsh sweetness. The fact that all these companions died of such ordinary causes, it only enhanced the feeling. Characterizing the Doctor as week was such a blow, but it seemed so right. It's not something one ordinarily associates with him, but in all honesty, it's true sometimes. Time feel cruel then; time was the villain in this, but it's so more terrifying than any person in a metal suit because it's not a physical thing, something you got across very well. In the end, it's just a concept of course, but it frightens so many people, and those who aren't frightened should be. This was such a strong piece, and I completely adored it.

This is amazing. I agree completely with what Sporks said.

Wow, this is beautiful. And so sad, but completely accurate, if you think about it. Time does lead death, really.

How I had hoped that this would be a Dr Who fic! :D

Your description of time is amazing and accurate. You really underlined the relentlessness of it all, with the description of the first two paragraphs.

The way you then moved on to describe the deaths of three companions was good, as you then showed the reader with examples how cruel time could be, taking away these lives. Even if you didn’t know about Dr Who, I still think this is an effective structure.

In the penultimate paragraph, the weighing of The Doctor’s pros and cons was lovely. And the last sentence stood out so well, rounding off the whole piece.

This was fantastic. I love how you showed how the companions died one by one, and then finally the Doctor. It's beautiful and poetic and haunting and very, very lovely. The ending line is perfect, though: Time cannot take the Time Lord, but it can try.

As Little Miss Malice has said, this was beautifully haunting.

I think I'm tearing up a bit!

I love your personification of time as an object, and then using this idea as a metaphor for death. One of my favourite ideas was when you said "even after surviving everything else that life has to throw at you, after surviving the knives and the swords and the guns and the wars and the brutality of the human race itself, you cannot escape time." I really liked the image you created of time being oblivious to anything humans can offer, and it really shows the power and hold it has over us all.

It's stunning.

I'm curios, how did you decide how each companion died?

That was so haunting. The way you made "Time" actually mean "Death." It was fantastic, and the simple layout matched so beautifully with the story.

That was brillant, I love detail and the desciptions. I love the mini stories of the deaths and the way you wrote about the doctors near death was excellent