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The story itself was very heart breaking. Sadly something almost exactly like that happened here.

Buuut, I felt like it was lacking in emotion. :/ maybe you went for a numb tone? It just came off like you didn't know what to feel.

But it was still good. Despite the lack of emotion, it was written well. The last line did make me want to cry. I think with some editing, this could be heart wrenching.

I loved the summary, though. It captivated me easily.

This was very good, I love the simple layout and the colors matching it. I like the description you used and how she got pregnant with a typical drinking guy and the new girlfriend comes to beat him up. I like the way she told her mom and she finally accepted the fact her daughter was hang a baby and this just flowed real well together. This was very good and a job well done. I think you should add more detail though to what happens when the girl fights her.

Ha. The short description thing with the "Fail" made me laugh xD
I actually like the layout.
Plain yet pretty.
So...I'm confuzzled. Was she pregnant and lost the baby, or she thought she was pregnant but really wasn't? And what if her boyfriend (that asshole) made his other girlfriend beat her up on purpose? AND WHY CAN'T ANYBODY BELIEVE IT'S NOT BUTTER!?

I liked this. I hope there's more. Maybe getting into the things of wanting but not having, y'know?
:}

This was really tragic. The idea is something I don't really read on here; I don't really find stories where the girl looses the baby in the end. It, to me, made the story real. I also like the reactions when everyone found out that she was pregnant - the emotions that came out of her mother, ex-boyfriend, and her ex-boyfriend's girlfriend. You captured all of their emotions perfectly. It was really well written.

aweee sadness :'(
but excellently written.

That was simply amazing.
so sad though... I started to tear up when i read the last line.
awesome work.
xxx

I know I commented this one before, but I just find it so sad and heart breaking. I know what it is to want something but have it taken away.

I loved this.

I died when I found out that she had lost the baby. I wanted to kill that fat shit Hannah. UGH. But back to the subject, this was written beautifully. You did an amazing job, xoxo.

This was amazing.

It makes me sad though. And now I'm afraid my sister will lose her baby. :(

I really liked this piece.
Both twists, Hannah and that last line both caught me off guard.
It had subtle hints of raw to it, emotions--you captured how negative teen pregnancy is and then twisted it all with the sad fact that she'd wanted the baby.

Very powerful indeed<3

I really liked this piece.
Both twists, Hannah and that last line both caught me off guard.
It had subtle hints of raw to it, emotions--you captured how negative teen pregnancy is and then twisted it all with the sad fact that she'd wanted the baby.

Very powerful indeed<3

This was so sad.
I liked it(:
You captured it perfectly. I've known a few pregnant teenagers and I know how they felt and how hard it was and is for them to take care of the child. You captured how scary it is too. Especially since the father is that kind of person.

I loved how you started the story with: Her eyes widen as she reacts to the words she’s just heard. It fit the story line perfectly - it being a teen pregnancy story and all.
This was sad as it was beautiful.
Your words were laced with a lot of meaning and emotion which I love to read in stories.
<3

That was so sad!
Oh my goodness, I want to cry now.
I love how everything was so real. The characters, the situation, it was amazing. It was all so relatable. I really liked it.

I felt awful for the poor girl. No one even asked her what she wanted even though it was her child. And her boyfriend's other girlfriend? What a jerk.

I love how short this was, but you still managed to get so much emotion in it. Usually really short stories don't seem to work all that well, but this one did.

Amazing job. I really loved it.
<3

This made me tear up. I know what it is to be so close to getting something and having someone else just snatch it away from your grasps.

It was reall well written. Your story managed to make me sad and piss me of all at the same time.

Great writing. :)

Oh my god, this was completely heart shattering, yet scandalous.
I freakin' loved this.

This is one of the most relate-able pregnancy stories I've ever read.
This story has a place in my heart. <3

:)

That tugged at my heart strings.
I knew something would happen to the baby- whether her ex made her get an abortion or her mother. Or that the girl would get too attached to the idea of having a baby and then realize that the pregnancy test was actually negative. "-.-
Poor little baby.
It just a few months, it could've been born. Had a loving mother, supportive grandma, and a washed up father. (Completely serious.)
It's the American dream. (Sarcasm.)

I liked how the layout wasn't distracting. I adored the plot. Normally, I hate teen pregnancies, but this was different. She wasn't a spoiled brat that wanted the baby and then complained about every little thing. And it wasn't really about sex.

Brilliant.
<3

Awwww. Oh my gosh. This is absolutely amazing! It's so heartbreaking. Everybody was so happy when she lost the baby, except her. ;_; This is fantastic.

Every pretty word I wanted to tell you has already been sad, aha. But that won't stop me from telling you them again.<3 (:

I love how relistic everything about this was. It wasn't all fluffy, no, it was Blam, honest and emotional---"raw" and or "brilliant." This was one of the most amazing things I have read in a while and Gah! I love it even though it just broke my heart.

I also love how you conveyed this beautifully in such a few words. It kept the attention of the reader without overbearing them with a bunch of words.

Amazing, Amazing Job. <3 C:

D:
Sad face!
That is how a lot of teen pregnancies are, though. Sad to say that, but it's true.
The best part, THE FONT WAS HUGE!
I love big fonts because I can actually READ IT! <3