It's Your Fucking Nightmare - Comments

umm ok this is basically just steamy rape. in your defense, I didn't read the sequel

i liked it, i think that it was good how it wasn't like most other fanfics where the star and main character are in an ever loving relationship where nothing can go wrong.

I agree with the comment above, maybe you could've used a bit more description? :)

I liked how you used the same storyline, but just altered a few things to make it completely different and unrelated. The vibe was so different from the sweet story, and you probably aced the contrast part of the contest, since in the sweet story he is waiting and in the sick story he forces her. Completely opposite. This part has a very creepy tone to it, especially after having read the sweet part. I also like your character choice - Syn seems perfect for playing both parts. I think you could have perhaps made the sick part more detailed to make it more effective, but otherwise it was a good short story.