August 4th, 2010 at 08:43pm
Just on the above comment, I think the layout is fine. Has a dark, creepy tone to it, which suits the story well. I can read it fine :)
For starters, it was great that you included the same characters, which included the dog. A few contestants haven't managed to do that, so congrats :) I would like to point out that there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes (in both stories) but nothing that was too major. This one was original and interesting to read, although more detail about the pain and emotions she felt would have made it better. You had a good contrast between the two entries which was exactly what was needed :)
dude that was pretty intense but good stuff. I love it. ;D matt is crazyyy!