Dear Diary - Comments

*sniffle* the end...oh that was just touching.

That is love there all the pain. It was wonderfully written and I don't believe it is cliche.
=)

Lines that I loved most:

"Like I was drowning in a pool of standards, and I just cannot surface."

"It would not matter to me if the world had ended right there and everything went into chaos."

This was a true piece of art.
I liked how you compared his parents to the Devil and demons. Again, the tone is very clear. You stimulated the audience with the emotions that character is going through. The flow is amazing, you did great with the transition of timing. the banner matches the story perfectly. This story made me so sad, but it was so good. I liked how you tied up the end with the P.S..

Oh, that was so sad, but really beautiful - I like this line the most:

Today, I was cast down into the lowest pits of Hades. To burn in guilt and worry for the rest of this pathetic life.

I love that kind of imagery. Brilliant job!

D: I filled up. That was heartbreaking. Beautifully written, but so sad.

I hated it when they were caught. I just wanted them to be able to lie there. It's just so tragic, and the devastating thing is that there are parents like that =/

But this was so well-written. I loved it. It was so sad though. Excellent job, and good luck in the contest =]

This was... beautiful.
And heartbreaking.
:/
But I loved it.

Wow. This was really interesting, and well-written to boot.

I like how it's in diary form. Not many can pull that off, but you did so excellently.
There's a couple grammar errors I noticed, but only a couple.

This is wonderful. Really sad, but I like how it turned out. Looove. <3

Football, Soccer soccer doesn't need to be capitalized

The adam and steve thing made me chuckle a bit too X) I liked how dramatic and emotional the piece was, even if it made it seem a little less real.

If you could comment on [rl=http://stories.mibba.com/read/173333/The-Heart-Exchanger/]this[/url] please?

Aw this is so sweet!
It's amazing, definatly not like ordinary slashes, like honey; said.
I really loved it, it was cute and touching.

I am actually crying. this is something completely different from anything I have read. It was good. At first I thought I wouldn't like it but I did enjoy it. Very well written and beautifully presented.

This is really great, and well written.
And it's brutally honest.
This is great!

This really was touching. I was on the verge of tears at the end of this.
I really, really liked reading this! It was different from some of the slashes I have read on here.
I loved it!

I Love It.
I Cried.

I like this a lot:)
It was well written, descriptive, and the plot was very interesting.
I love the layout, by the way:)

Is it bad that i snickered at the end? It wasn't cause it was bad or anything, it just reminded me of the phrase; "God said Adam and Eve, not Adam and STEVE."
But this was really good. Better than a lot of your other writing, actually. :D
I'mm a whore it out in my next journal. :]

That was beautiful