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  • daggers

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    wow, brit. just.. wow.
    i can feel the emotion in this. you have a real voice when writing.
    i don't like beth for inviting jimmy over, and i don't like jimmy for standing erin up.

    but poor erin. it sounds like something i'd get myself into unconciously haha.
    August 13th, 2010 at 07:12am
  • LeleDisco

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    Why do I feel like I can't stop reading this?
    August 4th, 2010 at 09:41pm
  • LeleDisco

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    Ahhh. I love this so much. I feel like I can read it 5 more times.
    I also think you should continue the story, like in the point of view of Beth, Jimmy, the police and her Mom. That would be cool.
    July 30th, 2010 at 11:32pm