Balloons, Fans and Pasties - Comments

I love this! I can't wait for you to update! I like her character and that she's doing burlesque because she loves it and it makes her feel confident. Also, I want to be a burlesque dancer so this is just all together a good story in my opinion. :)

I did like the fact that in the first chapter she explains why it is that she chose this career choice. And that you just didn't go with the obvious and say that she needed the money but that she did it because it made her feel better.

The flow was kind of clipped so I'd say that is something to work on. But other than that I certainly liked it.

this is a very interesting story and I don't think if you included romance in the story it will be too samey like other stories on mibba. As long as you make the romance unique and add your own to it and avoid any major cliches then I think it'll still be cool. Relationships and romance just happy to be a really popular subject. Update soon (:

you changed the layout! interesting....update?

this is an interesting story! more please! Um, when shes doing the pussy check it says the other girl listed her dress, i think you ment to say lifted... and when she's talking to Chris as Lynda it was a little bit confussing, but i think i get it now,,, please update!!!

First off, I want to point out that the idea for this story, though mother-daughter relationships are often strained, is quite creative and definitely not something you stumble across every day on a site like this.

Though the first chapter is really short, I like how you immediately put the relationship between mother and daughter into perspective and give reasons for how tense the relationship has always been, rather than just hinting at it or playing it off in pretty words and phrases. At the same point, you shatter whatever image of false confidence that Samantha might have by initially pointing out her insecurities.

In a few short paragraphs, you portray a part of Samantha that the reader can relate to.

The fact that she tries so hard to hide from the world this other part of her life, Miss Lynda Love, by having another job and trying to pretend to be an average girl, adds an interesting twist that could, and probably will lead to further conflict. It's a good hook. ;]

In chapter three:
"Hey Lyd,

I don't know if that's a typo and supposed to be 'Lynd', but I figured I should point it out just in case.

I wonder if this Chris guy happens to be the friend that her coworker was going to introduce her to... xD Can't wait to find out!

This story looks really interesting and I'm glad that it's this one that I claimed to comment. ^^

As for the layout, I absolutely love Betty Boop and think it fits really well with the plot!

Well done :3

Let me know if you need a banner or something.

I really like this. I'm glad you whored, because otherwise I probably wouldn't have read this. It doesn't sound like my kind of story topic, but I really do like it. I like how you take something dirty, but turn it into something good because it gives her back her confidence. Nice job! Keep up the good work.

This seems like a good, original idea for a story, I like it :)

I actually really liked this, and I don't usually read and subscribe to stories that don't use original layouts but this was good. I can't wait to see what happens next with her. I wonder if she will dye her hair or wear a mask or something. This is a very original idea, and I like it. :) Update soon.

Keeeep going, i like it :)

I'm loving this; different.
Please update soon?

There's not a lot to judge it on. It sounds like it could be interesting though. If you want to write it, write it! Don't give in to the whims of the readers! =)

hm intersting idea. I would like to see you continue it

hm intersting idea. I would like to see you continue it

Oh cool! I love it :)

I think this is an interesting premise for a story because of the sex object/sexual freedom dichotomy that seems to surround this kind of profession, along with stripping.

I did think it was rather short, though you did say that in the author's note. I just think there are some thoughts in this that could have been expanded on a bit. And one thing, I thought that the mother's language was a bit formal for the situation.

But it's a good idea for a story.

Love it :)
Keep going.