Helpless - Comments

While the emotions of the narrator were clearly and practically tangible and the mother was incredibly realistic, this left me kind of unsatisfied. I'm not completely sure why, but nevertheless it did.

Regardless, you did a good job. :]

^thanks guys but i dont really understand what you want me to change :/ please let me know!

I agree with juno. about the grammar errors and the spacing. It makes it a bit hard to read :/ This was really good though. I think I'd die if my mom left D:
Great job! <3

This needs to be spaced out more and there's a few grammar errors.
It was really sad though. Well done.

:(
That was so sad.

"No, didn’t I tell you already? We cannot do that.”
I feel like it would flow better with can't instead of cannot.

"Would she ever forget her work to see what I needed? click."
Click would have a capital.

“Bye mommy, I’ll see you” the train door closed, “later.”
After the first quotation there needs to be a comma.

Otherwise, you can really feel for the poor girl. It's really relatable, which is also a good thing.
Good job. :)

That was a good drabble. What you left unsaid was made up for by the summary and chapter title, and the actual content was short but sweet.

Aw, this was sad.
I could really relate to the character, my mum can be the same sometimes and I felt that her helplessness was very vivid. It wasn't overdone and it was well thought out.
I really enjoyed this :)

I liked the quote in the summary. It fits well, and tells a bit more about the story. The chapter title really helped with that as well. It was all nicely written. I liked it, and how well it worked with the emotion. Nice job, thanks for your entry! :D