Unspoken - Comments

This was beautiful, creepy, and amazing :)

This was just amazing story.
I love your description and the way you write is amazing.

Amazing........ This is the first story where the description under the title literally grabbed me and practically forced me to read it
"From the glassy waters below, inquisitive eyes caught mine, shimmering sick curiosity and deriding, unspoken words; words that I knew full well."
Just..... Amazing:)

I really like this.
The title doesn't do it any justice; I'm the type of person to be drawn in by titles, so sue me.
Very nice imagery.

This line sounded like something straight out of a poem:
Here, I am welcome; undisturbed and unpunished by crude mankind.

& for some odd reason, because of the setting, it reminds me of Pocahontas.
Because of the vivid descriptions of nature, maybe that's why I get that impression of it.

This really scared me which was its intention.
Oh, sure. You can run. But you know I will catch up to you. It may be days,
weeks, months, or years, but I know no bounds. Convulsive fear gripped me.
Yes, you can run… but don’t you dare try and hide.
The protagonist running away from this entity is very interesting.

I like how the progression of a simple trip to a meadow unfolded.
At first it was a safe haven and suddenly it became a forbidden place,
and dialogue wasn't a big part of the story. Typically, I like stories
with a balance of dialogue and sensory details but this is an exception.

The sensory details were incredible. I haven't read anything like this before.

Whoa..
That was really good. The way you wrote this story was...just ...whoa! My one shot is nothing up beside yours (haha) this was crazy good.

The layout was really nice too. The font was too small for me though...then again my eyes suck and I don't have my glasses but ANYWAYS very good =)

Wow, from the first sentence your wording drew me in. This was lovely, the adjectives, the visual, the theme of nature, the haunting dialogue with the elements of nature, the progression, it was amazing. I loved this, it was eerie and your imagery was amazing. This had a very poetic feel to it and it was awesome. Great job!

you never cease to amaze me.
nice work.

This is so wonderful.
You have such a way with words--
every phrase is powerful and stunning, and leaves me breathless.
You have so much talent, it's awe inspiring.
I adored the vivid imagery within this,
and the brutal honesty you emplyed to illustrate your protoagonist's emotions.

amazing job, as usual.

<3

There were so many quotable lines it this, I won't even try. It honestly was inspiring, and absolutely gorgeous. The language was positively exquisite. I just love your word choice and the way the story flows. There was a great sense of mystery, of tension in this piece. I also loved the vague ending; it really left you thinking.

My only criticism would be that the story layout is too small, the writing area itself. It felt a little, how do I describe it, squeezed? It kind of distracted me as I was reading, unfortunately. But honestly, this was absolutely perfect and I loved it. You should definitely keep writing.

oh my lord.
your writing never ceases to amaze me.
i've read pretty much all your stories, and they just get better and better.
your intricate use of details is flawless.
i don't have words to say about this.

Wow.
That's honestly all I've to say about this. You're an amazing writer.

This is the first story I have ever read where the first sentence is my favorite. I'm not even joking.

I was convinced that I was the only being within the radius of the thin, flourishing forest that was aware of the hillside meadow that dropped down into the lake’s beryl waters—at least, that’s what I told myself

-Tears-.

This is so wonderful, dude. I love your writing, and it's just...ah. You blew me away, dude.

Dr.

You make me jealous. But I just love it. You're such a great writer. You need something published, you just do. Just, EXCELLENT.

"The night was young, and the moon dark, leaving the cosmic heavens to gleam their brightest"
My favorite line..

This was intresting. It pulled me in with the first paragraph and as it ended I didnt want it to.
You have a very rare way with words.

Whoa.
That is all I can say.
Bravo. *standing ovation* I thought /I/ was a half decent writer. O.o You blew me out of my seat.