I really like how the lyrics, the picture and the prompt tie into the story very well. :) I like that you've even got that picture there, it helps set the scene in a physical way compared to what you had to do in the story - which was more focused on the manipulative aspect of it all - which is good, because I think you did it very well. :) I liked that it didn't focus too much on their surroundings - the concrete and possible ramp or bowl was all that mattered and the two characters. When I read it, it sounded like it was a dirty game, whoever won got to take the girl home and do whatever - but then by the end of it, they were both played and I thought that was pretty good. :) It's a neat little story. :)
August 8th, 2011 at 10:27pm
