I enjoyed it so far I also like how each chapter has a theme word at the beginning it's interesting. I suppose some more metaphor and figurative language could be implored but over all it's pretty rad.
May 25th, 2011 at 07:52pm
you told me to tell you if it was bad. here i am commenting.
&& i think this story is AMAZING !
i didn't find any mistake at all.
well, except one. On your 4th paragraph, instead of As, you wrote ASs.
but all in all, the story's great. Love it.