Written in Blood - Comments

The stories title
I like it, just a little cliche. It grabs me though.

The layout and picture
I really like the layout. The picture is very cute.

The summary
:] The summary catch my attention. It was nice and cute. I loved it.

The drabble was cute. You are very very talented.
This is one of the best drabbles I read.

Good job.
I shall comment the rest later >.<

Whoa! That's awesome. I think this was my favorite drabble of yours.

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"I'm sorry," she said sincerely. And I believed her like I did when she said she didn't kill my girlfriend.

I was preparing myself for another boring romance when I read this line. Made me go "WTF?!"

You're pretty talented. The main character showed pain, and a need to pull away from a passion that's so addictive, he can't let go. I don't know how you managed to show all these emotions in a hundred words but it was done very cleverly.

Good one!

Awwwww poor guy.
I loved the layout, but the writing was almost too small for me to read...
You should make the font a little bit bigger.
But this story made me feel pain. Which isn't normal for me.
That means you're good ;)
Keep on writing stories like these :)

Loved the layout, the summary picture was great.

This was so sad, but it was amazing.

This was the best drabble I've read today, and today I've read about 20, no lie. ^_^

Good job!

The raw pain in this almost hurts the reader. The feelings and descriptions in this are so real and wonderful, but I'm a little confused with Lila and Elise. I couldn't tell if she'd died or not, or if the part of her the narrator loved had died and replaced itself with something new and the narrator didn't love.

The descriptions were great, but this could've used just a bit more so you knew a little more of the back story on who all these girls were. But, other than that, it was a lovely story and you wrote it quite well. So, great job ;3

This is a teeny bit vague, but since it's a drabble, you can't do much about that, can you? xD Anyhoo, this is really cute. I liked the hanging questions; it keeps you guessing. Lovely job! <3

This is a bit vague but expected with a drabble for they are short.
The idea/concept of this was really different which I applaud you for.
I rather liked this; a lot.
:D

That was really good.
It was short but it held alot.
I liked the way you went about it.
And like the others, I did have to re-read it too until I really understood it.
I think it was pretty powerful at the end too.

It was wonderful, you're a great writer:]

I had to read it a few times to really understand its meaning. But I finally got it and it was pretty sad, to say the least. It was definitely deep and heart-wrenching, even if it was super short. But that's okay, because drabbles are supposed to be short, sweet and to the point. (:

It was written really well, too. I don't know, the detail was elegant and well-thought out.

My favorite part was:

My heart had helium caught inside it, and my stomach wanted to explode with the panics it had.

I don't know why it was my favorite, but it was. The way you described it just fit the rest of what followed perfectly. (:

Good job, yo! :D

I'm a little confused with all the hanging questions this gave, but I really kind of liked it. (: It was nicely written, had pretty detail, and to top it all off, it was on a lovely layout. :)

Good Job.<3 C:

Okay, I get it now! It's so deep, and pretty!

I need to read that again...And again and again. I love the layout, the title, I kinda don't get it, but what do I know?

This was good.
I like how you made it easy to picture what was going on.
This was kinda deep, and it makes you think.

This was fun to read. I agree with Caravaggio when it comes to the hanging questions. I feel so bad for him, but at the same time, I want to shake him "Don't be with the Demon Girlllllllll!!!!!"

Please write a sequel?

It's a drabble, it's supposed to be short. I may write a sequel to it to answer those questions but I also might leave them hanging ;)

I didn't realize how short this was until after I started reading it, so I'm going to comment two of yours. :D

. . . This left so many questions. Why was she murdered? Why is her boyfriend shacking up with the murderer? Those are the two most important. XP

But it was very good. I think the confusion is what made the story. It was simple, but it was powerful. Very good.

D: Awe.
There is a lot of people who are like that, though. They're with someone who is just f-cking Satan, but they still stick around them. >.>
I love the summary and layout. Both very pretty. ;D

Wow, this is really impressive for your first drabble! I like it a lot. You painted a picture so clearly in my mind in just under 100 words. The plot was well formed, characters developed... I love it! The layout was nice and simple but like this drabble, it spoke volumes. Write more drabbles please!

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Wow, this is the best drabble I've ever read! And I've read quite a few.
Is this really the first you've written? Good job!
It's really impressive that you have such a thorough plot developed in so few words! And the character building was done so well!
I was hoping that I would have something to criticize since you asked for criticism, but honestly, this is just SO INCREDIBLE that I can't find anything to complain about!
You write beautiful, truly, you have such a gift =D