Black Betty - Comments

I was very surpirsed to see that you were reworking the story. I thought it was brilliant the first time around. You are the author though, and you have final judgement over your own work. I'll be reading every step of the way. I love this story, and I can't wait to see it getting better.

oh i hope that this means you will start posting again if you are rewriting the story.

Poor Jimmy! I can't accept the fact that she just shut him down. I have a feeling he won't let this go so easily, even if he said he would leave her alone. At least that's what I hope. I can't wait for the next update. I adore your characters!

Please keep posting, I'm positively intrigued. I notice you actually have good grammer, like no one else aroud here. Thank you! I can't tell you how much I appreciate not having to skip misplaced commas between every other word.

Please keep posting, I'm positively intrigued. I notice you actually have good grammer, like no one else aroud here. Thank you! I can't tell you how much I appreciate not having to skip misplaced commas between every other word.

I love me some Bethany backstory. (:
And I love the idea of Asha's first snow. Even if they can't spend all day in it, they have to build a small snowman or something! As usual, great update.

I would have reacted the same way Bethany did if I found out Christopher died and I was locked in a godforsaken hellhole.
Asha is adorable.
Daphne is a weirdo, she has an affair with the bible

Well, Daphne's quite a creeper. It scares me that the mean science dudes are like the least of Bethany's worries. I never trust a bible thumper.

This story is fantastic. It is beautifully written and you arrange the story very well in regards to chronological order. Your descriptions are just plain amazing. I seriously think that you could get this published, i can't wait for the next chapter!

There will be more backstory eventually. I'm keeping her a mystery for now for reasons which you'll find out later. Thanks for commenting :)

The date was adorable! I really like Jimmy. Their conversation about family got me thinking though; Are we ever going to bet more of a backstory on Bethany? The story is following her, but she's pretty much a mystery.

Sorry you're sick! I am happy for the update though. Today was one of the worst and most stressful days I've had in probably over a year and this update definately brightened it. I just love Jimmy! For some reason though, I feel like Bethany's assumption that he could eventually accept her and Asha is gonna jinx it. Maybe I'm just paraniod like that...

Finally, an interruption in my stream of comments! Lol. So while I have plenty of feedback about the update, you will see none of it in this comment. You have to stop apologizing and calling your work anything less than great! Have faith in your writing. Its good. At least I think so. And not to sound concited or anything, but I happen to have amazing taste in pretty much everything. :D

You're good. Embrace it.

i just read the prolouge, and this story sounds epic! one thing though: when you have the beginning of dialouge, you have a space right after the quotation mark.....uh...but other then that this is a very good story! update! im gonna read the rest soon!!

Jeez, the prison guards are mean. These people may have gifts or whatever, and may be harmful to people, but that's no reason to treat them like THAT. I mean, that is HORRIBLE.

Back to being a super commenter. Ooh, that could be my superhero name! Super Commenter, ready to comment on your story at any time, any place where interent connection is available! I like it, its quite nifty :D But enough about me, on to the story. Christopher seems like an amazing kid. I expect a little follow up on him, just saying. And am I sensing a little romance in bloom between Bethany and Jimmy? Well, I guess thats all I have for now. Super Commenter awayy!!
Lmao, sorry, that was corny. And now I'm really done.

Hmm, my third comment in a row, uninterrupted. I'm beginning to feel like a stalker. Lmao. Oh, well. It happens, right? So now I'm insanely curious as to what exactly Stone and his researchers were trying to find and use. I mean, at first I just kinda thought they were keeping the "gifted" people out of the general population, maybe trying to take away their gifts. But now I'm feeling like maybe they want to, I don't know... harness their powers in some way. I love that this story make me think, I love coming up with theories. :D

First thing first, lemme get this out of the way and let you know that I think the background's pretty nifty. :) On the topic of the story, I love Audrey. She's so sweet, and its amazing of her to not judge Bethany. I feel kinda bad that Asha has no one to play with. I suppose it'll be easier for her to make friends without giving up her powers once she leans to talk though. I'm really loving this story so far!

Well, in short, I love it. I've never heard the song, but I'll google it. You can google anything these days. Lol. I can't wait for more elaboration on Bethany's decision to leave. And Asha is a sweetheart! Its quite possible that I've been pulled into the story by her alone. I'm a big softie and I love kids.

So, I've never heard of the song 'Black Betty', but I kept on reading your story.

I have to say, I love the connection between Bethany and Asha. Bethany is such a sweetheart, even though she doesn't know it. And Asha! Who could forget about her? She's, like, the epitome of sugar and everything nice. Did that make sense? Absoultley not.

I love how you get emotion through to your readers. Especially that sick hospital that did those horrid tests and such to her. I automatically hated everyone that has any relations to them. Anyway, I decided to listen to Black Betty. And that's all I can listen to, while I read your story. x]