I like it so far, it's a different plot. I just need to point out that in the title, you don't need the "Zacky V" part. If it's about zacky, you can simply put that in the descriptions. A lot of people on here get annoyed with titles that are like [title]~*name*~[More title]
Other than that, it's a good story. And I saw you asked about pictures. You don't really need to add pictures to your story, no one really does on here, and that is another thing that is looked down upon is people posting pictures with their stories or stuff like that, but if you wanna you go [img]image url[/img]
with all that stuff, pictures, fonts, colors, all you need to know you can learn here
But umm, yeah before i ramble more, I really like this story so far, I giggled at how Brian tried to take her home right after he met her, and Zacky was mean, kickign her out like that.