Introduction: Your introduction needs to be punctuated and revised. You've got little to no punctuation.
Chapter: It was a moving piece and does tug at the heart strings, especially to those who are deeply in love. I couldn't imagine losing my partner.
I will say though that the ending paragraph felt rushed. She decides to die and then bam, she's gone. I would have liked to read a bit of deatail of what her thoughts were, did she see a light, was Alex waiting for her in the light?
Chapter: It was a moving piece and does tug at the heart strings, especially to those who are deeply in love. I couldn't imagine losing my partner.
I will say though that the ending paragraph felt rushed. She decides to die and then bam, she's gone. I would have liked to read a bit of deatail of what her thoughts were, did she see a light, was Alex waiting for her in the light?
Well written and emotional.