Breathe - Comments

That was so lovely. It was very calming, very peaceful. It had such a very nice tone to it that just made you want to read more.
The descriptions were amazing and made the story more real. The emotion was very clear and easy to feel.

I want to sing to the birds and own the moon.

I simply adore that single line. I love the idea of owning the moon.

Great job.

The repitition of breathing in and out is what really gets me in this story. It's so relaxed and calming, something that's perfect to read before you go to bed so you can just calm down a bit easier. The fragments and simple sentences work, flowing smoothly and sleepily into the next without seeming overdone or boring. I love how you make loneliness seem so terrible, since it is, and how gentle the paragraph following it seems.

I hope the narrator doesn't have to wait long for that someone to lie alongside her. She deserves to have that happiness and that beautiful simplicity that is a companion, as does everyone else.

Lovely work :3

I am so insanely jealous of your skills. This is breathtaking, if you don't mind the pun, and beautiful. Not to mention the picture its self if beautiful as well. All together your witting leaves me speechless as always. :)