October 5th, 2010 at 10:24pm
Well I was a bit iffy to be honest at first,
but once I read to the second paragraph in the first chapter, I was hooked.
It's a new idea and I think you are off to a fantastic start.
The only tip I can really give is to maybe scan through, there were a few parts that I think you worded just a tad off.
But I loved it.
Subscriber for sure.(:
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